Review Detail of TriadBrew in Reincarnated As A Bow (Not Updated)

Read through the first ten chapters. I could see myself getting into the story more should the author take some time to clean up the first few chapters. There are huge blocks of text that build up things and often there are rapid system dialog flying past you. The interactions with the character and the system are what you would expect. There isn't much deviation from what I would see in the genre which left me wanting more. As far as the dialogue between characters it feels very robotic and stiff at times, where a lot of the characters don't have their own personalities and mimic the same tonality or response structure of others. I would relate this to something like "The Room". "Oh, Hi mark." "Hey dave." "How is your day going". Very one dimensional. The actual writing itself doesn't have many grammar mistakes, which was good since it made reading easier, but there are some sentence structure issues. I think you would benefit from something like Grammarly pro to help with this, and the huge walls of text. That said I hope the story continues to grow and can flourish from these suggestions!