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Lover_of_Fantasy
Lover_of_FantasyLv12yr
2022-04-03 01:17

writing quality - good and readable though there r few mistakes but nothing serious story development - pacing is good though abrupt. needs more explaining character design - too early to tell update stability - need more chapters world backgroud - need to describe the world a bit more. if you're aiming for a medieval warfare then this book, i assume, needs a lot of geopolitical descriptions or something 😂 i hope this story wont solve vrything with magic all in all, a good read and the only major downside is the abruptness and unnatural character dialogues dnt stop writting 👍

The villainess and her Advisor conquers everything.

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One_Winged_Angel
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Really intriguing story! John is an excellent and well designed MC and Athena will be an excellent foil. The world is really well designed and there are great ideas built up by the author. The only critique is the grammar issues. They don’t detract from the story, but there are some stiff conversations and dialogue here and there, which is always hard to write fluidly. Definitely worth a read and I am excited to see where the story goes from here!

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Sharyanna
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I'm not used to writing reviews, however, I try my best. The world and the characters are very interesting, I feel I want to know more about them and want to see their progress with excitement. Overall I found this one very enjoyable! I can recommend it! The only thing that kicked me out of my daze was the grammar mistakes, and not the minor ones. Somehow I felt a word is missing, also I felt a whole sentence missing too.

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