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LucyXiongLv123yr
2022-03-16 02:20

It's only four chapters so far, so way too early for a proper review, but the story line is okay so far. It's starting out kind of slow so far, and I don't really understand much of the motives yet, except that the FL wants to become powerful and to be recognized. The MC wants to write stories without being in dangerous situations, but yet he's put himself in a dangerous situation, so it's a little confusing for me. Like I said, the story line is a little slow, so maybe it'll explain more later. 3.4 because I had a hard time understanding the characters motives and reasons so far. I also feel like I can't see the world the author wants. Maybe the author wants the reader to make up the world, and that's fine, but maybe every now and then describe the environment, the noises that the MC hears, the smells, the cobwebs in the corner, etc. Just to draw the reader into the world. Keep working hard author! Doing good! A little tweaking here and there and it'll be good.

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I'm not used to writing reviews, however, I try my best. The world and the characters are very interesting, I feel I want to know more about them and want to see their progress with excitement. Overall I found this one very enjoyable! I can recommend it! The only thing that kicked me out of my daze was the grammar mistakes, and not the minor ones. Somehow I felt a word is missing, also I felt a whole sentence missing too.

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