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AsurasTear
AsurasTearLv132yr
2022-06-06 13:08

mate everything was fine and dandy. the story was good the character was good the background is kinda mysterious. the update stability so far is nice but there are some problems that author really needs to think about. first of all what is this book about. it's game so you need to make it clear the data about the enemyy when they fight the reward that he gets,the quest that he takes, etc but instead this novel is like an urban slice of life romance type paced story or even an Japanese high school type story which is inconsistent from my point which makes it barely readable like a game novel should be and another point is the exaggeration of expression. for eg. if I say he smiled,".........." which makes sense but when you put he widely smiled,".........." then that makes it extremely exaggerated for me. if it's once or twice it's fine but if it's after every single time that he smiles you put widely after it then it makes it unpalatable for me. overall everything is extremely good but author should definitely focus on what he is writing about if he wants to make the novel a top class which the reader want to read again and again. thank you your sincere reader

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