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MelibeeLv52yr
2023-01-05 04:34

I think one of the reasons why female leads in line action stories aren't read as often is because at first she may be cool and strong but the moment the ml is there she becomes stupid and always needs to be saved by him. This is one of the reasons fantasy romances with a female lead scare me of. For some reason they make the fl strong but the ml stronger than her even though she is the mc and went through more struggles. The ml is also always supposed to be cold while the fl like a mary sue. I hope this one isn't the same because they start to frustrate me and asexual ones don't seem to exist here

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Ebube_Uzoma
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First of all, thanks for the review, I actually learnt something from it. But to be honest, I think my book isn't like any other regular FL books. I think you should give it a try.

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Ash_Monarch
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First off let me start off by saying something about the writing quality. I think the writing quality has improved significantly as you read more of the book, although there are a few grammatical errors it's nothing that would put you off reading. Now I'm gonna list some pros and cons of the novel. Pro's - 1. The plot flows smoothly and is intriguing making the reader want to know more which is a good thing 2. The characters are designed well and are portrayed in a way which brings to light each of their different personalities. 3. The uniqueness of the mc Zelta, although I'm a Male I was still able to relate to her and sympathise with her as she endures her tough plight. Con's- 1. For one of the characters Zain, I was left confused on whether she was a Male or female until I read the fifth chapter, so I suggest you maybe add something showing that she is a female so readers don't get confused. 2. The length of your paragraphs are too long. Since I read on the app, the paragraphs are like half a page long which is a chore to read, instead breaking them into smaller paragraphs of between four and five lines will help tremendously. 3. This is not a con, but a suggestion. If u don't already have grammarly, the download it as will help you in editing and correcting some of the incorrect spacing in the first few chapters. Overall, this novel has potential, if the author polished a few things then it will become into a really good book. Anyways, good luck author, keep writing and continue the good work!

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