Story has potential but the execution is not done well. Mc’s intelligence is MID for a pillar men. Story is MID. Author is MID. Characters bland like cardboards and just focus on Mc and some on his mother. Pacing is not that good. Mc barely uses his past intelligence and so far only taught his mother COOKING ideas/techniques/idr, he hasn’t thought of maybe changing the peoples ways to benefit him and just says ‘since they already sacrificed people, it’s ok for them to be vampires’. Mc had them move north but didn’t SPECIFY WHERE and just said ‘ where United States and Canada would be in the future.’ And say stuff like he could probably use them for business reasons. Author needs to fix the plot-holes. Ex: the part where he just SWAM THROUGH the Atlantic and came to Europe, skipped all the things he could’ve done in Europe and solely focused on trying to find if the stone being in Asia is true and rushing there. World background is hmmm ok. Writing quality is good. Updates are good. There hasn’t been much to criticize as there are limited chapters for now. I would recommend to edit the chaps or just do a do over.

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I give you 5 stars because it's JOJO AYAYAYAYAYAYAYYA....................................................................................

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I swear to god, all these fanfic mcs are abnormal as can be. Like who tf takes some random and probably innocent people and kills them? This hit me the wrong way, just like experiencing second hand embarressement for a mc. Do people actually like their mcs to be psychotic murders? I mean, at the very least try to make a reason to justify the mc killing random people.

So far, the story is going well, but will there be romance?😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌

Ii hate it because of how he act and how some thing are like force .......,...................................,................,..........

Nice, story I really enjoy it, especially about the small details and history in that period. The grammar is good, I don't really see any major grammatical issues. Keep it up, hope you continue posting some more chapters.

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