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WalterHeisenberg
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2022-03-09 01:28

Story has potential but the execution is not done well. Mc’s intelligence is MID for a pillar men. Story is MID. Author is MID. Characters bland like cardboards and just focus on Mc and some on his mother. Pacing is not that good. Mc barely uses his past intelligence and so far only taught his mother COOKING ideas/techniques/idr, he hasn’t thought of maybe changing the peoples ways to benefit him and just says ‘since they already sacrificed people, it’s ok for them to be vampires’. Mc had them move north but didn’t SPECIFY WHERE and just said ‘ where United States and Canada would be in the future.’ And say stuff like he could probably use them for business reasons. Author needs to fix the plot-holes. Ex: the part where he just SWAM THROUGH the Atlantic and came to Europe, skipped all the things he could’ve done in Europe and solely focused on trying to find if the stone being in Asia is true and rushing there. World background is hmmm ok. Writing quality is good. Updates are good. There hasn’t been much to criticize as there are limited chapters for now. I would recommend to edit the chaps or just do a do over.

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WalterHeisenberg
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If you hate what I said, then idc it’s a review of what I think of it and not like those 5 star spammers and exp people.

Crazy_Team
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If you didn't actually care you wouldn't have taken the time out of your day to write this reply in your reply section but ok.

WalterHeisenberg:If you hate what I said, then idc it’s a review of what I think of it and not like those 5 star spammers and exp people.
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