Review Detail of Darth_Novel in The Lonly King

Alright, author here, I just wanted to take this shameless author review to say some things about this novel. 1. I've had this idea brewing in my mind for a couple months now, and I finally took the initiative to start writing it. It was first going to be a psychological horror. then, it turned into something about chess, and now, it is about a boy who just wants to have a good life. He is the definition of a normal human being put into a situation he doesn't want to be in. In the first chapters, Nate will appear more dense and confused. That, I think, is a normal reaction of someone who was killed and left in a black abyss without any of the five senses. 2. This is going to be more serious, so if your looking for a light comedy, this isn't it. I still encourage you to try it out, though! 3. I'm going to try to be as realistic with this as possible, so if you want a wish fulfillment character, your not going to get it 4. I will try to develop the world/kingdom as much as possible, so stay tuned for that 5. I'm going to be doing the best I can in the grammar and stability section. Hopefully I can write, at least, 3 chapters a week. At the beginning the chapters aren't going to be that long, but I hope to change that the further along I get. If you have any criticism or questions, leave a commit on this thread and I will try my best to answer them.