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Carlos_Balbizan
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2022-10-25 11:50

poor writing and history... to the point that someone like me who uses a translator (I'm still learning English, and I alternate between reading normally, and with a translator) find it completely irritating, and all that not to mention the so-called "POVs" that don't work for nothing but disappointment.

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OVERLOAD69
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The POVs go away around chapter 30 or 40 after that I just stuck to one format, I only later realized that it was irritating since I wasn't really paying much attention at the start. Also, the grammar is only bad at the start, going past 40 chapters it has only improved since then.

Carlos_Balbizan
Carlos_BalbizanLv1

it's really worth getting better and better as you progress in a story, but the main thing is the opening chapters, as they are the "first view" when reading the story

OVERLOAD69:The POVs go away around chapter 30 or 40 after that I just stuck to one format, I only later realized that it was irritating since I wasn't really paying much attention at the start. Also, the grammar is only bad at the start, going past 40 chapters it has only improved since then.
OVERLOAD69
OVERLOAD69Author

Well I am quite lazy to rewrite the stuff, I made up my midn before but then just gave up, she you still reading the fic?

Carlos_Balbizan:it's really worth getting better and better as you progress in a story, but the main thing is the opening chapters, as they are the "first view" when reading the story
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Personally as much as I would love to give this FF five stars in every category from my taste this is the absolute most I can give for this FF. First off the writing quality is great. Better than pretty much every fanfic I’ve read on this site save a select few. Very few grammatical errors and an extremely small amount of spelling errors from what I have saw so all good there Second update stability. I haven’t been reading this for a very long time but from what I have seen and how quickly new chapters have been released it is very consistent so no problems there either Third story development is also very good and have very few complaints there however the few that I have are very broad and generally don’t matter much however from my point of view this FF could be a lot better especially when I comes too how the world around him reacts to most of his actions (by him I mean MC). Many of the reactions do seem genuine but some of them seem far fetched, plausible but in some ways can be seen as such. Fourth character design is great. Many of the characters seem real and alive which personally is very pleasing to read. At first it seemed that that may not be the case but after a few chapters it became the truth and the FF became much more enjoyable after that. The personality types that you chose for certain characters although sometimes annoying are somewhat believable and very likeable. The MC has a pretty realistic and not very idiotic personality an did relatable which I am thankful for because it makes the story so much more enjoyable. Fifth the world background. Since the only background that is being used is solo leveling there isn’t much that in my opinion can be said. The author used the background and plot of SL beautifully and integrated the MC into the world in a cliche way but made it work and didn’t completely disregard it a few chapters later but made it used for character development throughout the story which was pleasing. Now adding that fact may not even be on topic so I’ll add this. He has given me a firm image of what the world looks and acts like not only around the MC but the characters surrounding him as well All in all a very enjoyable FF and I am looking forward to more chapters

ArcNemesis
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well I like Solo leveling very much so I want to find a good fanfiction about it and that's when I found this fanfic and when I see the rating is high so I got a high hopes on this but the story development destroying it. It's just simply a wish fulfilment fanfic and the mc playing to be hero. He got so much power from the beginning without even trying. I don't understand why the rating so High that make people took a bite by it but get destroyed when reading it. Writing - 3🌟,I can understand what the story about but I thought it a bit lacking variety. Story development -1🌟,MC get so much power that can make him a god at the very first chapter and MC can't make good use of that power.simply this story is a wish fulfilment story,The romance is a bit lacking and with highly intelligent I think MC is quite stupid. Character design - 2 🌟,I like Yoriichi tsugikuni character and the other characters from SL but the way you make how they act actually disappointed. Updating stability -4🌟, Cause you updated this story well,4 chapter a week is already good. World background -2 🌟, Although I like SL I don't know why because you put so much power in the mc the world background just simply became a play ground for MC. Well that's it for me,To people who talk about being cruel or rude to this criticism I think you should know what the "Criticism " mean first. I can't make a story doesn't make me don't deserve to giving a criticism cause from criticism that someone can learn and know how the other people thinking work about an something. Keep the stability of updating and improve the story development, don't make it too plain.

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