tbh I had a lot of expectations for this, but my brain hurts reading this, this has a lot of xianxia vibe, like at first when the kazekage is talking about the "will of the sand"(funny😒) it's like those elders in a sect citing a poetry and student being enlightened and there is that refining chakra thing i could go on and on but i wouldn't really like to give so much spoilers even if the said fanfic/novel is trash

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Pls don't drop it's a really interesting concept i doubt will ever see again. oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo

I like the premise and the story's kind of fun to read. What took me out of it was the author not considering how an adult or even an older naruto-world-aware teenager would act in the situations presented. He wants to make the MC go through character development, but he chooses to do so in a way that would work better on an actual child growing up in that situation without pre-existing knowledge of the world. Long story short, having be a reincarnator with world awareness is not conducive for the developments I'm seeing the author try to invoke in the MC. The second gripe is an extreme use of hand waving. Whenever the author wants something in the story and it doesn't make sense, the world will bend in his favor to an absurd degree to get it. His first female companion is the easiest example to cite. There's not nearly enough knowledge of the series available to pinpoint one orphan in a country on one business trip. Aside from all of that, if you're able to broaden your suspension of disbelief, it's a fun concept that has a lot of potential.

Shameless author writing his own review ^_^. I'm here because of my friend, and I'm trying to make a Naruto fanfic. Any critics and suggestion would be very valued

Both the story and the character I like, but it is true that the way the story is being told is quite weak, the continuous "sarcasm", jokes or occurrence that there is in the story, such as calling the background characters "cannon fodder", among other things take me out of the immersion and really, in my opinion . Otherwise I really like the direction the story is taking, but this kind of thing takes me out of reading.

I give you a review of a person and not a bot the idea of ​​chiasaki power in Naruto was good but why nerf it already that power if you know how to use it is good but in Naruto world it is somewhat weak besides being a beta mc

author How weird is the plot Do not you think, work on MC and over minor characters and work on the plot Romance Add Pakura or OC to make MC a little softer MC got ruthless and it looks strange to me and to others too (think) and make the nickname a little original i have no idea and make a mask like the original chisaké it will look so cool lan come on author good luck on creating fanfiction

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