Review Detail of RzgarKurdmann in One with Magic

I just wanted to let you know... I am no experienced writer, before writing this I had read and watched lots of shows and see how their characters react, create plots, fight scenes and etc... I would say in a storyline I did very well and plot too, I have couple of plots and plot twists in the novel. The novel will probably end between 25 and 30 chapters, it is just for a contest. I am bad with female characters and showing their emotions. two heads are working on this novel. I am bad with dialogues and try to show you only the most important things. I also write the only important things to the story, whatever happens off screen will be given a small explaining. I write short fights, because they are more realistic, I watched some anime but their facts are kind of unreal it takes long there is open spaces to attack which they don't use and etc.. simply we keep everything or try to keep everything realistic as possible. Please leave a review, thanks for reading. -Rzgar -Nawaf