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2022-08-01 09:10

The story has a lot of potential, but it is wasted in a easily evitable way. The most common problems are: - LOL. - The author explain as something work just to forget it and making it work in a different way. - Irrealistic or dumb plot device (alert minor spoiler, jump to the next point if you don’t want know: an explosion that erase 75 square km of the city where the mc is, but he says he doesn't know anything because he didn't watch the news and he was at a friend house, friend that previously he said was in the same city. To not add that even though the explosion happened in a residential district there were just 67 deaths). - Expression used in the wrong way. Although I may sound harsh (both here and in the comments) I don't want to offend the author, but just point out thing that in a much needed rewrite should be corrected. As said before the novel has a lot of potential and it sadden and annoy me to see it wasted. I hope to not have offended or upset the author with this review or my other comments.

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Well, at the cost of sounding repetitive, I apologize for being harsh in the comment, but in my defense all the way to chapter 24 there is a crescendo of enraging solutions or not well thought things. After chapter 25 I was so annoyed that I had to stop reading. The plot is too forced and you seems to adopt the MCU's (Marvel Cinematic Universe) scripture method. It is truly a pity.

Night_Crawler619
Night_Crawler619Author

You're not harsh if you're genuinely expressing the reason of your disinterest. Anyway, thank you for giving this book a chance. And thank you for your constructive criticism.

72demons:Well, at the cost of sounding repetitive, I apologize for being harsh in the comment, but in my defense all the way to chapter 24 there is a crescendo of enraging solutions or not well thought things. After chapter 25 I was so annoyed that I had to stop reading. The plot is too forced and you seems to adopt the MCU's (Marvel Cinematic Universe) scripture method. It is truly a pity.
Shizz_go_crazy26
Shizz_go_crazy26Lv14

Update??

YourDad_
YourDad_Lv5

what a pity....i partially agrees with your points but this novel is really good and had huge potential if you read it further, but whatever.

72demons:Well, at the cost of sounding repetitive, I apologize for being harsh in the comment, but in my defense all the way to chapter 24 there is a crescendo of enraging solutions or not well thought things. After chapter 25 I was so annoyed that I had to stop reading. The plot is too forced and you seems to adopt the MCU's (Marvel Cinematic Universe) scripture method. It is truly a pity.
Shizz_go_crazy26
Shizz_go_crazy26Lv14

For real

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