DarkElven6Lv142yr

2022-03-22 19:40

I am writing this review while ignoring the many grammar issues. These will be corrected with an editor. The story has a lot of technical explanations in the beginning which was initially off putting. Clearing that up a little will make it easier to read. I am enjoying the world background as it feels fresh and not overused. The sweet relationship Ryan develops with his new mom is refreshing . I am more curious about Ryan’s father. How did he make it to earth and I feel like I need more backstory. Don’t forget to clarify this later. All in all, I think this would make a great addition to my library, provided regular updates are continued. Thank you for the read!

4.6

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Rookie_DraconianLv3

I am happy that you liked the book so far. (I definitely do need an editor) I am not putting many technical terms and explanations so that an average reader wouldn't be confused, but I'll try to explain a bit more so that it stays at the boundary between and explaining and info dump (will be dangerous, treading on such a thin rope) Backstory will be revealed over time, in installments of course. I also absolutely love your review! Thank you for the time you took to write this precious review.

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