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CreepingDarkness
CreepingDarknessLv143yr
2022-01-23 10:10

I really enjoy this story, especially Shizuya's sarcasm, his comments and how he interacts with Kakashi. Kakashi himself appears to differ from the original to some extend. And if I'm to go by the hints drizzled about here and there, there seems to be some underlying background between the two which will probably revealed as the story progresses. Can't wait to see where this will go! Regarding the technicalities, there were maybe a handful of minor grammatical issues here and there, but it was nothing major and mostly unnoticeable unless you're specifically looking for it. The story has a nice flow to it, if a bit on the slower side in terms of progress. Things could move along a tad bit faster, though that's probably a personal preference of mine. All in all, well done baby cousin of mine. I'm proud of you.😘 (A totally not biased review btw 🤫)

Of Cats and Dogs (BL/Yaoi)

Bakashi
4.4
13 Chs

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Bakashi
BakashiAuthor

Nope, no bias at all, Kat 😅 But thank you for your rev nonetheless 😘

3yr
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Astravor
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love everything so farrr plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz dont droppp 😂😂😂 this is really intersting hehehehehehehehehehehehehehe this is really good

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Akahime
AkahimeLv11

i love this fic. keep up the great work, author-san! ;)

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Ancusq
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Writer, don't write this story on a straight site, you write this story on wattpad, I'm really fed up with stupid writers😐👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎

3yr
butterfly_sunlight
butterfly_sunlightLv4

I love this fanfic, but when comes out a new chapter?........................................

2yr
Daoistb3CO7C
Daoistb3CO7CLv2

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Rozelin_Sabaz
Rozelin_SabazLv1

very nice. The interaction of the character with Kakashi is very good, I can't stop smiling while reading, I hope the new episode will come often and when will the next new episode come?

3yr
Gd_Sys
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moreeeeeeeeeeeemoreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeemoreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

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tanor
tanorLv4

The writing in this fanfiction is generally satisfactory, but there's room for improvement in terms of paragraph structure. The text often presents as a daunting 'wall of text', which can be quite exhausting to read. Utilizing new lines more frequently to break up the text would greatly enhance readability. Regarding the integration of the main character into the existing canon, I feel there's a missed opportunity. The character doesn't seem to add significant value to the narrative. In adaptations like this, it's often said that it's better to "show, not tell," but in this case, when the storyline closely follows the original canon, a concise summary might be more effective. Additionally, the concept of a 'cat demon' doesn't quite blend seamlessly with the established elements of the story. It feels reminiscent of a typical Naruto plot device, lacking originality. I also have reservations about the age of the main character. While I understand that they are a reincarnated individual, a time skip in the story might be more appropriate, especially when considering romantic developments with significantly older characters. Speaking of romance, it currently feels a bit rushed. Allowing the romantic aspects to develop more slowly and organically could benefit the overall narrative. On a positive note, I really appreciate how the main character expresses himself. His unique voice and perspective are engaging and add a distinct flavor to the story. This aspect is one of the highlights and contributes positively to the fanfiction.

1yr
sharwy
sharwyLv4

love the fic it's interesting to think about it so please don't drop

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