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1Dreamer_Owl
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2022-03-22 07:29

Translated - I'm up to date with the chapters (28 chapters) and here's my review... (get ready to read XD) the premise of the novel itself is good (even excellent so to speak) but Harry's reunion with death feels too empty and rushed so to speak what good I can get out of that dialogue is the advice and reminder that death tells the mc... On the subject of inheritance... 10 houses are too exaggerated... at least the only houses that Harry could have by right would be Potter (right of birth), Slytherin (right of conquest for defeating Voldemort and killing the basilisk), Griffindor (pulling the sword out of the hat showing that he is worthy of the surname) and Black (because Sirius is his godfather and "legal guardian" since he himself names him heir) and Perevell (on behalf of the Potter family branch by the blood) the other 5 are too many so to speak since it does not explain in any way how he obtained them and the only thing that makes you understand is that thanks to death and magic he is heir.... And summarizing the subject of the fiancées on the other hand... it was taken too lightly since they are not a minor thing in the magical world which is linked to magical treatises the part of the future wives and you also have to think about their due development for each romance and not just as "trophies" and Harry's development in that part feels like: Sirius: 'harry as you are the heir to 9 houses you have to marry 9 women' Harry: 'ah ok...wait...what! but why!?' Sirius: 'because you are the heir to nine houses' (Black 10th house doesn't "count" as it is heir in name unless Sirius has a child or dies so Harry becomes Black Lord) The treatises between families is fine but hasty there may be improvements, we must not forget that Harry is only 12 years old (he is about to turn thirteen) and he has 5 years and more in school before he comes of age and so his manor houses. The good thing is that at least Harry no longer has to live with his abusive family and is taking things into his own hands and they are showing him and teaching him how to be and behave like a Lord and he is living with people who appreciate him as person (although that part of the novel also feels a bit out of place) also what I liked a lot was the part of Sirus Black's trial and his acquittal... finally... looking forward to how the author shapes his novel, keep it up 😎👍❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️

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