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Kenrio
KenrioLv113yr
2022-02-16 03:35

a bad write fic full of inconsitences and with a world background that is extremely bad and not though enough. author make it see extremely difficult to have a blue talent Pokemon but mc gain one extremely easy. we can t forget some more minor thing that make this fic difult to like. mc losing his memories and becoming nothing more than a of character,mc being a 10 year old that act like a adult but no one question,him having aura but his first and most important Pokemon being a normal type. author making only able to bond with one pokmeo only to change this later. resuming a fic with good potential but with a bad writer

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DaoistcXPCun
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For you to wast your time reading it and thinking its bad but still bother to write a review makes you a loser who wants attention if your so desperate for attention i hope u can handle bad attention personally i think this is a good story with a writer that's flourishing his writing skills while you probably haven't wrote anything just read a bunch of books like a nerd

DaoistcXPCun
DaoistcXPCunLv1

i just read more of your comments on other books and you definitely seek attention if your that desperate as your parents for attention oh your parents probably neglected you that's probably why you seek attention so desperately loser

MissPinkElf
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and for you to make an account just to reply make you a bigger loser

DaoistcXPCun:i just read more of your comments on other books and you definitely seek attention if your that desperate as your parents for attention oh your parents probably neglected you that's probably why you seek attention so desperately loser
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ILikecultivation
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Here is what I think about this Fanfic: 1: The Writing and Grammar: Unless you are one of those who want everything PERFECT, the writing quality and grammar is one of the best in this FF. Author barely makes a mistake but also corrects it when its found. So 5 star there 2: Update Rate: we have 10 chapters so far within two days. But the author is going to drop the rate but it is still 2 chapters every other day which is really good. So 5 star there 3: Story Development: The story so far is going at a good pace and does not feel slow or too fast. Not a typical Riolu, Ralts or Dratini which makes the Mc too op too soon but rather his first pokemon had good potential yet he is working hard to make it strong. I mean the first fight was a perfect fight between two ten year old kids. so 5 Star there. 4: Character Design: I love the Mc, he is not stupid but also not a 'strategy guy.' Very realistic, I mean how many of us claim ourselves to calculate every step we take? It is great to see for once a normal Mc which is of course not stupid but not overly smart. Just a normal, like me. So I like it. 5 star there. 5: World Background: An interesting concept has been introduced and I am looking forward to how it goes. He at least have no system which I like. Just the foreshadowing of some ideas he has given to us is mind-blowing. But I will still give it 4 star there as those ideas have not bloomed yet and that the story is still going. To those who see this before reading, just a heads up, my personally opinion but I loved the ending of the prologue, couldnt have been better. To author: Just like the Mc says, "I don't give a flying Duck," I also want you to not give a Flying Duck about some who say it is not a good ff. It is a very good ff and you are a very good writer. if anyone tell you 'Not good grammar' tell em to write there own then. Smh, people really want perfect grammar when half of em can't write. Me included XD Best of luck for the ff, I hope you get success.

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