Item: NOT HARRY POTTER AND THE SYSTEM
Rating: 2.8
Author: seli_1999

seli_1999Lv113yr

2022-01-02 17:49

Hey author🙋‍♀️ur concept is gud and entertaining...hope it will be more fun in the future... suggestions: 1. please mention any author notes in any chapters using (A/N: blabla). 2. there are grammatical mistakes and spelling mistakes. hope u will clear em. 3. check format of chapters before their release since dialogues of diff people are stacked up in same paragraph. It looks cluttered. my review is just upto 4 chapters so don't be discouraged with less stars... anyways all the best there👍

NOT HARRY POTTER AND THE SYSTEM

some_writer

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some_writerAuthor

thank you for your criticism now there is a chapter five there are even less spelling mistakes

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