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Valixiant
ValixiantLv23yr
2022-04-12 14:13

Alright, this is a decent story. Extremely similar to The Legendary Mechanic, except the main character is all in all, a less competent version of the TLM's main character. My main problem with this novel is the constant POV changes. I've read quite a few light novels, and there is a very small number of genre's where a POV change every chapter or two works. This is definitely not one of them. There are far better ways to show the interactions with players and NPC's. In a lot of new novels, I notice POV changes are steadily getting worse, with MANY novels adding these in. Everything else is average. If anything slightly below average, due to how much of this novel seems very similar to TLM. Overall, novel would average, but the POV changes outright ruin it. Theres a POV change every other chapter, it's really annoying. Most people are going to skim through it, causing many readers to potentially miss important information.

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The POVs disappear by end of arc one. They were important as I had to force out some info dump in the novel and make it seem genuine and I know people may not like it as much. But this is the folly of early chapters. There are zero to none POV changes in ARC two and the story is focused entirely on the MC.

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Hello! The Author of this novel is here. I am rewriting the details here as the last time was written on android and I can't type on it properly. The MC here is not super smart, super strong, super manipulative, or good at virtually everything. He is just an average person who knows how to use common sense and like in life, he experiences failures a lot. But life is about growing and evolving and our MC will do just that. All his bad experiences will make him stronger, all his losses give him more experience and he will grow up to be a monster later. There are also lots of side characters in this novel as MC is not a one-man army, he will slowly create a group of his own because a single person can't do everything on his own. And none of these members are those that worship MC even with his knowledge, instead, they all are part of his group for their reasons. About the story: ARC1 - Mostly introduction and how the world got affected by players and introduction of the organization that will play a part in the power struggle in the future, nothing important besides some introductions. ARC2 - This happened between the five-year interval players disappear for and will have the most growth on MC's front. This arc will tell the tale about MC finding that the world may not be the same as he remembered and some changes have taken place. ARC3 - This will be the player's arrival and probably the arc where MC will leave his base planet and meet the other characters[native/npcs] from other starter planets whose story we have been following since ARC1. And not all of them may be friendly. ARC4 - TBD Just read it guy/buddy/fweand So just some details about the world. The world is divided into three newbie planets each with its Power system. Planet of Prenia is the knight and magic planet. There are two unique paths in this, The knight path which gives you power similar to dragon ball z characters, and the classic magic system. Planet of Taurus is the mutant and externalist planet. There are two unique paths on this one too. The mutant power system uses biomass and genetic mutations to exceed their life limits and reach transcendence while the Externalist uses tools, mech, and advanced weaponry to fight. Planet of Danav is the beast planet. There is only one unique power system on this planet and it's called Shaman or totem warriors. These warriors can control the beast, use beast spirit to enhance themselves, create totems, etc. Besides these 5 power systems, there is a sixth one common on all the planets. And it's called Domain and has a different name on all the planets. [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]

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