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2022-01-07 22:18

Interesting so far. I love the setup of her having really vivid dreams, so she thinks her new predicament is just another dream. It will probably ,make it even more horrific when she realizes this is real. You used the wrong word here and there and there are some sentences telling us things we already know but overall your writing is good. The mystery of what is going on in her new life is a good hook that makes you want to read more. I think I will be coming back to this novel.

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One of my favorite tropes. Another transmigration story. Review Proper (Warning: Might contain spoilers. I don't want to use the spoiler system since it will make my review all mushy with no spacings.) Writing Quality. I see no g-errors which made reading really smooth. I am also amazed with the how detailed the thoughts the author put in each of the scene making it very vivid. Stability of Updates, Hmm, the updates are stable so far. Story Development, Many said that the starting chapters are pretty dragging, I guess it could be if you are used to reading fast paced stories. But here, I guess it's natural since it's the perfect way on how the protagonist, Ly, was introduced to her new world as Adelaide. But as you continue to read especially when she met a kid, probably one of the potential male lead, the pacing move more swiftly and each chapter gets more interesting. Character Design. The fl Ly/Adelaide is strong and smart and also "real". Her emotions feels real and can be relatable most of the time. She is not the Mary Sue type where she is suddenly good at everything. It seems the author knows how to shape her in a natural way. And since she transmigrated into a child's body, she is surely knows how to use advantage of that but not too much that it will look out of line. And I wonder where the OG Adelaide soul went though? The other side characters, I hope to see some more growth and story to them as the fl develops too. World Background. The world background is quite intriguing. A mixture of modern or more advance science plus magic. Something that can really great look forward too. Usually most works that I read prioritize more magic and really try to avoid the science behind it since it is really cause more tons of research for any writers. But the novel here, I can see the effort and time the author put into this work making any readers appreciate more such work. Recommendation: To any fan of transmigration story, you can give this story a try and see for yourself if this will be unique with other same genre. But to me, with such well-thought story line, I can see it standing out to more of the same genres already. Keep up the great work, author!

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