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Cynical_Stranger

Cynical_Stranger

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2021-10-09 JoinedGlobal
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  • Cynical_Stranger
    Cynical_Stranger2yr
    Commented

    Straight to the point ha?

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  • Cynical_Stranger
    Cynical_Stranger2yr
    Commented

    Exactly what I was thinking.

    -"This face is definitely fit for a king."- He thought to himself. -"At least more than my original face."-
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  • Cynical_Stranger
    Cynical_Stranger2yr
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    Appropriate response, would probably feel the same if I woke up in my fathers body lol

    "What the actual f**k?"
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  • Cynical_Stranger
    Cynical_Stranger2yr
    Replied to ElPrimo

    Rainwater makes sense, fruits won't give you enough water to survive for days. Adding a small line about that should be enough 👍

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  • Cynical_Stranger
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    What about water?

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  • Cynical_Stranger
    Cynical_Stranger2yr
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    You would think he would be more paranoid to drink anything after his father was just poisoned.

    Suddenly, he felt a searing pain in his head. It felt like someone was stirring up his brains with a red hot metal rod. Gritting his teeth, he waited for the pain to fade away.
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  • Cynical_Stranger
    Cynical_Stranger2yr
    Commented

    A poison for the soul, interesting.

    He knew that there was a type of poison, the "Reincarnation Poison", that can be used for murder. This poison breaks the bond formed by the soul and the body, forcing the soul to reincarnate into a new life, effectively killing the person, as all the memories would be lost. Unlike others, this poison had no cure at all, because it directly targets the soul.
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  • Cynical_Stranger
    Cynical_Stranger2yr
    Posted

    I was bored at the start but this novel grow on me. I laughed out loud a couple of times and the character of the demon god is likable and fun so far. I find it kind of weird that his parents named him Lucifer like they knew he was a demon god. On top of that, how is he moving around and using magic when he is only months old? Even if he is a god, physically he is still just a baby. Overall I enjoyed this novel and may be back for more.

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  • Cynical_Stranger
    Cynical_Stranger2yr
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    lol

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  • Cynical_Stranger
    Cynical_Stranger2yr
    Commented

    Remember to add a "." at the end of your sentences.

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  • Cynical_Stranger
    Cynical_Stranger2yr
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    Not bad so far, the demon god's last words were hilarious.

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  • Cynical_Stranger
    Cynical_Stranger2yr
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    I wonder if the historians will fabricate more glories last words for the demon king.

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  • Cynical_Stranger
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    lol, I imagine him waving his hand and then ragdolling with a death scream.

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  • Cynical_Stranger
    Cynical_Stranger2yr
    Posted

    Not a bad start. You have grammar mistakes here and there and some of your sentences are a bit too long. I do like the way you describe things so far, paints a clear enough picture. I would appreciate more descriptions of the surrounding. Overall, a good start.

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  • Cynical_Stranger
    Cynical_Stranger2yr
    Commented

    *vampire's doing

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  • Cynical_Stranger
    Cynical_Stranger2yr
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    *listen to the hunters

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  • Cynical_Stranger
    Cynical_Stranger2yr
    Posted

    while I didn't read all the chapters yet, it is not bad so far. I really like your writing style, it is very deceptive. It paints a vivid picture in the reader's mind.

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  • Cynical_Stranger
    Cynical_Stranger2yr
    Commented

    Not bad so far.

    Ch 1 Jack Miller
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  • Cynical_Stranger
    Cynical_Stranger2yr
    Commented

    Interesting start

    Facing the mirror, I hugged my knees as I sat on the floor with my back leaning at the side of the bed. I poured water into the glass from the pitcher and reached for the unopened medicine bottle beside me and downed it all as the bitter taste lingered and spread throughout my tongue. Three empty medicine bottles can be found rolling by my feet. I threw the fourth one clashing it with the other bottles.
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  • Cynical_Stranger
    Cynical_Stranger2yr
    Commented

    lol

    [WARNING!! This is just a fiction story so don't follow anything that's written in this chapter. Because you won't be transmigrated, YOU WILL DIE!]
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