Review Detail of hidingpanduh in Over the Bridges to Singing Waterfalls

I really wanted to like it more, but maybe I'm just not used to reading the LN style of novels. For me the writing felt too stiff and constricted to be enjoyable the whole way. I think you could improve by balancing description with action/dialogue especially in the first chapter, and consider which words to put where would make the story more cohesive and make more sense, or flow better. Sometimes it seemed like there were too many things being described, like his whole routine from morning to evening without any major events to keep audience interest. However, what I liked was the attention to detail. I did think it is cool that you made the scenes so intricately put together, and the amount of details was enough. Well done on this novel, and with further consideration on the style of writing and expression of what you want to show readers, I think it can be an even better and more wonderful book than it already is with such a great concept.