Review Detail of Bit_Lucky in THE VAMPIRE'S ACCOMPLICE!

Aight here is my honest review and I may sound like an ass. (A little chapter 2 spoiler for ya readers who came to the reviews first) Message to Readers: Personally it's entertaining so read it. Give it a chance from 3 to 4 chapters. First writing quality: It is pretty but can ya put more detail into what the characters does and when I say that for example in the second chapter when she was having a tough time and she seems to be entering the bathroom. Describe what she was doing other then going to the sink or something like "I grabbed onto both sides of the sink lowering my head so I puke. I look back (Facial expression) and the painfulness black blah blah you get the idea." Seconds Stability of Updates: Can ya work on the quality more than the amount of updates (Quality over Quantity) as the people in the business world say. (I can tell why I have more views then you like you said) Third Story Development: It's actually good. Fouth Character Design: I mean I gave a 3 star so...yeah Fifth World Background: Did you ever describe the place where they were at from time to time? I sped through the rest when I got through 20 chapters. (3 stars) And last but not least I get why you have a lot more fans then me like I said to you in discord. Like what the tag says it gave what the readers wanted from your story. And wow this is only the third time I've been so serous with my review. Also speeding up my reading from 20 to the last. I can see you've improved (A tiny) bit. Now you better review mine also unlike other f**kers that just did nothing after I reviewed theirs. (It's probably because I didn't review theirs so seriously.) Honest review please [img=recommend]