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2021-12-14 20:57

I like it I hope the author dosent drop and maybe do a mass release cause I really enjoyed reading these 10 chapters and I think it has a lot of potential

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LucidBlue
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Firstly, I would like to start off by pointing out that I'm making this review at the most updated chapter today, being 184. I was going to write this review earlier, but upon getting to a certain point, which I will soon mention, I delayed it to now. Additionally, I want to state clearly that I do enjoy this story. The only slight issues I have with this may be resolved in time - and, naturally, in another 200 or so chapters, I'll make another review, or earlier if things worsen. If you like an above-average intelligent MC, aware of their surroundings and how to act to get closer to their goal efficiently and effectively, not too hesitant towards being 'cruel' along the way, then this may be a great story for you. Personally, I appreciate a non-braindead MC, and with how the MC's story is portrayed, it's easy to understand where they are coming from. I'll now skim over the subtleties of the story before to refer to the negatives of this story. Writing quality is decent. Not perfect. I spotted a few dozen spelling mistakes, missing words, or simple, general grammar issues, but it wasn't major in the slightest; it's not something to be concerned about. I only rated this four due to the appearance of these in addition to - while some unique and exceptional use of vocabulary was wielded, it fell short of what I would consider perfect. Stability seems decent... In truth, I read the whole book in two days, so don't quote me... Story development - ... yeah. It's good. I have problems with it, but at a fundamental standpoint, for the most part, it's quite good. Good layers to it, and it has some thought in it. Character design is there, and while not extremely varying, and displaying quite stereotypical representations or repeated attitudes, it has sufficient variety. It's above average at the very least, and the characters appear to be thought about and properly given an appropriate sense of life, though it could do with adding some unique flavor to it, at least in my opinion. World background at this point seems good. The reason as to why I use 'seems' or 'appears' is just because, despite reading nigh 200 chapters, I feel like... the randomness of the story is what disrupts a proper review. I'm giving the most honest and accurate review I can, and thus, from this current point, it seems 'OK'. I'll now go over the faults... starting with this. Cyberpunk. Boku No Hero Academia. *Squish* You're going to see the guts of Cyberpunk's lifeless corpse compressed into this story. If you envision the two worlds above squished together... well, here you go. Quite honestly... maybe word for word... Of course, at least, that would be the case if the MC didn't exist in the world. But, in terms of world building for the current chapter, it appears that this is the case. You will see repeated phrases torn from Cyberpunk in this story as well as the classic, very typical hero/villain sort of thing. It's not difficult to conjure up; but, with the MC as an oddity, it felt a bit unique, and random to a safe degree. At least, until the point where I just recently arrived at, near chapters 180 or so. I feel that a notable portion of my discontent regarding this story is simply from the point that while randomness was lingering on the edge for a while, and was soothed by seeing some logic here and there, I feel like it's becoming a bit silly again with the introduction of more randomness. This may protrude upon grounds of being bias, but the addition of a bunch of additional random individuals with completely abnormal and random powers just feels a bit too much for me; kind of ruins the sense of the firm idea I had about this story. It would chop the score down to 3, but I do have some hope for it. This is also the point I want to emphasize; if this is explained clearly and makes actual sense instead of the author just squishing as much randomness in the story in hopes of making it appear mysterious, then the score could increase. Now, beyond mentioning the odd world building and background, I want to point out that if you have watched One Piece and you recall those fights that lasted... upwards of thirty 20minute episodes, expect that here. In my personal preference, I prefer quality over quantity. The obnoxiously long fight wasn't necessarily bad, however I felt that it was quite silly. I found some repetitive and dull, but I can feel that the author just wanted to make the existence backing that enemy appear very mysterious and powerful, potentially in counter to how strong the MC is becoming. I love mystery, so don't get me wrong, and I do actually enjoy some fights which end up lasting a bit longer than expected... but this time, it just didn't feel like something necessary. It felt like filler. Again, I can see some reasons behind it, but just personally at least, I feel like this would have been better shorter. That makes up for the gist of my review. Overall, I count this story as a 4 for the time being. Intelligent, yet not-too-unique characters; many appearing very typical, but compelling enough to get me to continue reading. A world with great potential... but currently lacking in just about every department until the sense of everything being pulled out of a hat randomly halts. Again, I enjoy mystery, but not randomness; they're different. The quality is decent and will prove sufficient for the vast majority. Stability appears to be fine. And story development... I'm hoping it sets itself on a good incline. Overall, a good story which, despite its flaws, was readable in a day or two through its author writing it in a way which I would consider captivating. I look forward to more chapters in the future, and I'll definitely send through another review after finding proper grounds for another review. Thanks for the story, Author.

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