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2022-05-11 15:57

The general world building is pretty good, with a nice story to it. I would really like more of this. BUT there are a lot of errors, especially he/she her/his... and there are some weird story developments... like when Lydia, the mother of the Myra just comes outta nowhere and jumps him

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Hello! I know, I know, shameless self-review... but hey, anything else would only be hypocrisy on my part... why would anyone rate his own work as anything but close and dear to his heart? Anyway, I wouldn't want to spoil too much but figured some of my planned thoughts (at the time of writing this, the novel has just been posted) would serve as a good indication if you would like to give the story a try, or mayhaps not. Both are fine, and while I would miss you, my dear potential reader, in case you would decide to abandon me, I would respect your decision. At the very least, please give me the courtesy of telling me the reason, so I could continue to drive myself forward and improve! Writing is not just my passion, but currently, in these dark times, my only solace! --- When you check in for the first few chapters, you might grow confused and ask yourself: "Is this really a modern day, urban fantasy story? Why are we starting from the prehistoric era then? What is going on? Relax, my dear potential friend, there is nothing wrong! The first few chapters, serving as a sort of first mini-arc, will be playing out in the far past, showing an initial journey of self-growth and introduction to Aziel as an individual. I do not plan to push it for too long, but there are a few interesting ideas that were never explored in these novels, and I had this itch... As for the rest, this novel being a genuine submission for WPC #238 you may have an idea of where we are going. If not, or if you are reading this far in the future (...how's it there by the way? Is this stupid pandemic still raging on?), then allow me to copy the contest details here, as it would speak more without spoiling anything. "Male Lead - Strong Acting Weak Don't judge a book by its cover. Someone who seems weak and pathetic might just turn out to be an almighty person concealing his overwhelming strength."

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