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DaoistKWbwbE
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2022-11-17 11:27

La historia(antes de la re-escritura) me gusto mucho porque creo el MC tuvo un buen desarrollo de personaje(aunque para mi un poco apresurado) y actuar mas o menos como alguien normal hubiese actuado, hubo algunas cosas las cuales no me gustaron, tales como: 1.- Cuando el MC vio lo que le sucedió al otro 'el' en su futuro no mostró ni siquiera enojo(creo) se que se determino en volverse mas fuerte, que no esta mal, pero incluso yo un lector me cabreo lo que sucedió. 2.- Cuando se revelo que el no era el verdadero MC(de que el 'robo' el cuerpo del 'yo' en el mundo de date a live. La hermana se enojo y le reclamo de como no era su verdadero 'hermano' y todo, creo que estuvo bien de que al final lo aceptase porque el MC actuó mas como hermano que su propio hermano, pero para mi fue demasiado rápido, creo que al menos aun si lo aceptaba debió pensar en ello un par de días. 3.- Debió entrenar mas sus habilidades y coraje para las peleas, no veas a date a live como solo un mundo de citas, esa madre solo se llega a ver a si porque no querían entrar en mucho mas y hacerlo gore. Al igual que dxd, es prácticamente un mundo horrible fuera de las oppais y el ecchi.

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Demigod_of_All
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Okay. Thanks a lot for your review. Also, I'll definitely improve the story in the rewrite. I'm sure you'll like it. Thanks!

DaoistKWbwbE
DaoistKWbwbELv1

No hay problema, estoy seguro de que me gustara de todas maneras. Una duda, van a estar los mismos oc como ananya? creo que se llamaba.

Demigod_of_All:Okay. Thanks a lot for your review. Also, I'll definitely improve the story in the rewrite. I'm sure you'll like it. Thanks!
DaoistKWbwbE
DaoistKWbwbELv1

Con el paso del tiempo el apocalipsis pasa de ser una perdición y se torna una esperanza

Demigod_of_All:Okay. Thanks a lot for your review. Also, I'll definitely improve the story in the rewrite. I'm sure you'll like it. Thanks!
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