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This DAL fanfic is sure interesting...also Kurumi as the main heroine for the story! Kudos for that! Now let's get on an actual review. Writing Quality: 4/5 Pretty good actually. There are only few errors here and there. However, sometimes there are cringe lines you know? Kinda bugging me but well, overall, the writing style is kinda decent! Story Development: 3/5 At first it was okay, I can still follow it quite well. Many things don't add up like the fact Kurumi began to like the MC despite from what Kurumi had gone through for Shido. However, this is quite understandable, this is after all, a FANFIC. Unreasonable things are the norm haha. Setting that thing aside. As the chapters progressed, the story Development seemed to get bumpy and weird(?)...at least, on my opinion, please respect it. Character Design: 3/5 Yup, the OG DAL characters somewhat retain there personalities... is what I would like to say despite some of their unreasonable actions in the early parts, but it is still readable nonetheless. However, the MC... he's not the greatest but also not the worst. Undoubtedly though, many would agree with me if someone said that Sajru was acting like a simp, ugh. Updating Stability: 5/5 No more things to add. This is it. World Background: 4/5 Nothing much notable unless for the fact that this happens after the main events of DAL. It is interesting though, ngl. Overall: 3.6 An average novel in my opinion. Usually, I drop fics like this by I see potential you know? I hope this will improve further as I continue to read this story! It's quite rare to find some decent DAL fanfic with fast updates after all!

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