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2021-12-14 11:20

Can't wait for more, this is amazing fanfic... I just hope he finds someone to love soon... Who are you planning for the love interests? Pluto is also a cool name...

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mark_kiple
mark_kipleAuthor

hey, i realised i haven't given my thoughts on this book as a whole, so I'll review my own book lol. 1. Story: It depends on how you view it, it's technically slow-paced, but it's fast paced at the same time? idk how to describe it really, it starts at 5000 BCE, so quite far from modern day, and probably 70~80 % of the story takes place before canon, so if you don't like that sort of thing, you should find something else to read. the story is about a guy who's reincarnated as an eternal and he tried to live for thousands of years, seeing history using his own eyes, that's it really, that's the main premise, but a lot happened in between, the MC will 'lose' his sense of humanity as time goes on because of isolation, then gaining it again as he find love in the people he met along the way, this story isn't just about romantic love, it's also about familial love, how Mc deals with his family, and the love-hate relationship that comes with it. I admit, at the start is probably rough and cringy because I just started writing at that time and have no idea on what to do with the story, but it gets better(kind of?). I don't want to go to spoiler teritory here, but, let's be honest, most of you want to read a fanfic if you know who's the fml is, and in this fanfic, it's Thena, and only Thena. 2. World Building: I mean it's marvel. well, it's more history rather than marvel, cause as I said earlier it's 70~80% of the story takes place before canon so history plays a big part in this story. 3. Grammar: I don't speak english actively, so grammar is really hard to monitor sometimes, and I'm too lazy to find someone to proofread. 4. Stability: can't really update daily anymore, I'll just update when I have time 5. Character: Some say that this book doesn't have any character development, some say it has amazing development, and I guess both of them are right? I mean it depends on what 'Character Development' mean to you. if you like instant development, edgy/don't-care-about-people MC, that kind of stuff, than this book's not for you. anyways, if you want other opinions, scroll down, there's a lot of opinion lol. anyway, based on the review I saw, a lot of you dropped around 20ish chapters, and that's fine I guess, but I suggest you read until Chapter 50 until you form your opinion. Oh, and don't spam reviews, it's meaningless and annoying. I've got nothing else to say really, it's not really my best work per se as it's my second attempt at writing that went above expectations, but I'm quite proud of this book, mainly at me driving off the urges to drop it lol. that's it. bye

Dr_Chad
Dr_ChadLv13

I don't know about others but I hate Mc's personality. His personality is static, for over centuries no MC character development. Yeah, you heard me, no character development. Other characters have their own development but MC is stagnant. Even learning that he was killed by One Above All and was pushed around the bush like a slave, he didn't even have a trace of contempt. Yeah, he was like just chill about it. Even if you knew that the enemy your facing is omnipotent one should have a trace of hatred even if little but MC here was so ok being killed and was chosen to do things without hating OAA (no sort of revenge and planning for over centuries just to pay back OAA). A lot of cringe sentences and dialogue between characters. He kept saying that he viewed human as monkeys which is very hypocrite since he was a human himself in his last life. Even if his body synthetic since he is Eternal, don't forget that their minds are of mortal. That's why they got that dementia type of disease, Mahd WyRy. Over all, the world background is OK, since it was related to history even if I don't know some of it. And like the update stability is so slow. If you wanted to read, just hoard it and wait like 2 months before reading it again. And on top of that, MC is a freaking monk who journey towards the path of enlightenment. Yeah, a freaking dysf*nction*l virg*n who don't want to have romance since he viewed humans a lower life form. F**k, there are a lot of famous woman figure throughout the history like Cleopatra, Helen of Troy, etc. Don't expect MC to have any form of s*xu*l life even one night stand, since according to him he can't have s*x with 'monkeys'. Don't hate this review since it is just personal. I don't like MCs character development and creation.

Zen_Killua
Zen_KilluaLv4

I actually hesitated before reading this because of the reviews but looks like you can't trust 'reviews' with nothing but them, ranting about the story not fitting in their personal taste. Writing quality - I see no grammatical errors. Or maybe there are errors but i missed it since it's insignificant . Story development - Honestly, i really like it. I like how it's fast-paced but at the same time, slow-paced. I like the mc's adventure. From a human to an eternal with human's soul to a 'human eternal' who lost his humanity to an eternal who, in his opinion, eternals are superior than human to an eternal who gained back a bit of his humanity to an eternal who loved a child an acted as her father to a loving husband. I really like this. Characters - Above average. It's not like those top-tier novels where characters feels real but it's not like those stories where the characters are like robot reading scripts. Though, i must say, i really like mc's design. Both his outer and inner appearance. Updating stability - It's in semi-hiatus state as author said but i think it's the author is updating fine. Like it updates averaging 1 every 1-2 days. World background - Well, should we even talk about it? I mean, it's a fanfic, there's already a world behind it. Though, again i must say, exploring the history and using it is a very good idea. I also like the changes he made. Anyway, as you can see, I'm trying not to give spoilers as i don't want to ruin your experiences. Just dig in, honestly. Don't let the low reviews dictate what you will and won't read. As a reader, my advice is just risk it, dig in, and see if it suits your taste. To author, please don't ever drop this. I love thia story very much. Just watched the movie and this story satiated my thirst. Just want to say thank you very much!

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