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WM_Dizy
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2021-11-23 05:34

The grammer is unreadable and the dialogue feels unnatural. SkipSkipSkipSkipSkipSkipSkipSkupSkupllllllll lijkt of you hij of hoog got got got go go ok go go go oh hi

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Thomas_Hodge
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thank you very much for your input I will try to improve on this for you? anything g else you can say can will help with future chapters.

WM_Dizy
WM_DizyLv15

I would recommend using paragraphs and quotation marks.

Thomas_Hodge:thank you very much for your input I will try to improve on this for you? anything g else you can say can will help with future chapters.
Thomas_Hodge
Thomas_HodgeAuthor

Thank you very much for the advice I put out another chapter using advice from the comments please tell me any other changes that would make reading more enjoyable.

WM_Dizy:I would recommend using paragraphs and quotation marks.
Konrad_The_Fourth
Konrad_The_FourthLv4

Why anissa? Isn't she the one who raped mark?

Thomas_Hodge:Thank you very much for the advice I put out another chapter using advice from the comments please tell me any other changes that would make reading more enjoyable.
Thomas_Hodge
Thomas_HodgeAuthor

yes originally, but after the first season I planned on deviating from the original plot line stay tuned I promise you'll enjoy what I have planned

Konrad_The_Fourth:Why anissa? Isn't she the one who raped mark?
6BigBoneMeat9
6BigBoneMeat9Lv14

Is she going to r*pe superman

Thomas_Hodge:yes originally, but after the first season I planned on deviating from the original plot line stay tuned I promise you'll enjoy what I have planned
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