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Alchemist
AlchemistLv131yr
2023-08-28 19:14

I really wanted this story to be good, since I love the premise of the MC having Fou's body, unfortunately it just isn't.Most of the 'story' is just filled with status screens, item/skill descriptions and info-dumps, that are completely unnecessary for any fan of the Fate series.The actual story is filled with some of the most cringe fanfiction topes (like a comically evil Dumbledore and Weasley family), that most people are long since sick of.

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Fousan
FousanAuthor

How far did you read?it gets better later down the the line.this was started as a project to help my English and I was heavily influenced by a bunch of other things, I will admit that it definitely is not the best story.

Alchemist
AlchemistLv13

I read up to chapter 20. After that I no longer had the energy to read a story I didn't enjoy.

Fousan:How far did you read?it gets better later down the the line.this was started as a project to help my English and I was heavily influenced by a bunch of other things, I will admit that it definitely is not the best story.
Fousan
FousanAuthor

i mean entirety fair, thanks for the feedback though

Alchemist:I read up to chapter 20. After that I no longer had the energy to read a story I didn't enjoy.
Fousan
FousanAuthor

Hey, I just wanted to tell you that I've decided to Revamp the story from the start and make it better. However that revamped version is not going to be uploaded to here on Webnovel, if you do want to check that out I posted a new chapter for the story and you can find the discord code in there to find links to the Wattpad version and in the furture the FF . net version.

Alchemist:I read up to chapter 20. After that I no longer had the energy to read a story I didn't enjoy.
Alchemist
AlchemistLv13

I'm not really a fan of wattpad, so I'll check it out on ff.

Fousan:Hey, I just wanted to tell you that I've decided to Revamp the story from the start and make it better. However that revamped version is not going to be uploaded to here on Webnovel, if you do want to check that out I posted a new chapter for the story and you can find the discord code in there to find links to the Wattpad version and in the furture the FF . net version.
Fousan
FousanAuthor

np.I've also uploaded it to Spacebattles

Alchemist:I'm not really a fan of wattpad, so I'll check it out on ff.
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Wolf_king_fenrir
Wolf_king_fenrirLv14

[Plot-line] [The Void: A twelve–year–old Shirō wakes up in a void with knowledge slowly engraving itself into his soul.] [First Steps: An innumerable amount of time has past since Shirō has awakened within the void and he has gained a greater understanding of existence.] [Origin: Shirō begins to understand more about his soul and what his origin is.] [Skills: Shirō learns to crystallize his wisdom into {Skills}. Shirō creates {Sage} to boost his thoughts, and {Archivist} to sort information.] [Magic: Shirō realizes his Soul is drawing in Void energy passively, and begins to experiment with it resulting in {Magic Eater} and {Magic Core}.] [A Craftsmen’s Tools: Shirō delves into his growing knowledge concerning creation with the use of {Sage} and {Archivist} with the outcome being {Creation} to help streamline the process of making {Skills}, and {Destruction} to remove redundancies and possible imperfections.] [Understanding: Shirō begins to understand the limits of his {Skills}. Shirō uses {Creation} and {Sage} to break his {Skills} limits. Some time has passed and Shirō begins to understand the concept of evolution from his growing wisdom. Shirō uses {Magic Eater} with {Creation} to make {Evolution} to make his {Skills} evolve.] [Great Sage: Shirō uses {Evolution} on {Sage} resulting in {Great Sage}. {Great Sage} Suggest integrating {Skills} into one another to improve performance, Shirō agrees. {Great Sage} integrates {Archivist} into it’s self to improve processing and memory capacity, and uses {Creation} to make {Deviant} to increase {Skill} efficiency.] [Emotions: Shirō begins to refer to {Great Sage} with female pronouns. {Great Sage} begins to study her masters ever growing knowledge with {Archivist}. {Great Sage} uses {Evolution} to grant itself the ability to experience emotions to better assist her master. {Great Sage} Uses {Evolution}, {Creation} and {Destruction} on {Magic Eater} resulting in {Void Eater}.] [Rapheal: {Great Sage} uses {Void Eater} to provide energy to {Evolution}. {Great Sage} request permission to use {Evolution} on itself, Shirō approves. {Great Sage} uses {Evolution} on itself, resulting in {Wisdom King: Raphael}.] [Akashic Records: {Wisdom King: Raphael} request permission to evolve the rest of Shirō’s {Skills}, Shirō allows it. {Void Eater} evolved into {Void God: Azatoroth}. {Magic Core} evolved into {Magicule Breeder Reactor}. {Archivist} evolved into {Information King: Akashic Records}.] [Athena: {Wisdom King: Raphael} pause’s {Skill} evolution to inform Shirō of {Information King: Akashic Records}. Shirō suggest to integrate {Information King: Akashic Records} into {Wisdom King: Raphael} to enhance performance. {Wisdom King: Raphael} uses {Deviant} on {Information King: Akashic Records} to fuse it into itself, but with no results. {Wisdom King: Raphael} attempt again using {Evolution} and {Deviant} on both {Magicule Breeder Reactor} and {Information King: Akashic Records} resulting in {Goddess of Wisdom: Athena}.] [Naming: {Goddess of Wisdom: Athena} informs her master of her successful evolution. Shirō is surprised by the amount of emotion in his long time companions voice. {Goddess of Wisdom: Athena} informs him that it was the result of both the evolution and his desire for companionship causing her to gain a stronger sense of self. Shirō ask her if he should simply refer to her as Athena now, but is instead requested to provide her with a name to improve her abilities. Shirō ask how a name would improve her abilities, with {Goddess of Wisdom: Athena} then explaining the power of names. Shirō now understanding the significant of names, begins to go through the knowledge of legend’s that {Goddess of Wisdom: Athena} provided him, and decide to name her {Medusa}. After being named {Goddess of Wisdom: Athena} evolved past a {Skill} and became {Codex: Medusa}. {Medusa} greets her master and swears her eternal love and loyalty to him.] [Evolution: Having been a innumerable amount of time since {Medusa’s} naming, Shirō has begun to question if he can leave this void, to which {Medusa} says that’s the only way to leave would be to evolve himself. Shirō ask how, to which {Medusa} states that he would have to evolve and assimilate all of his {Skills} into one.] [Next Step: Shirō request {Medusa} to begin, {Medusa} complies. {Evolution} evolves into {King of Evolution: Darwin}. {Creation} evolves into {Creation God: Brahma}. {Destruction} evolves into {Destruction God: Shiva}. {Medusa} having finished her task, began the final steps to her masters freedom.] [Voice of The World: {Medusa} begins fusing all of Shirō’s {Skills} resulting in the creation of the {Voice of The World}. Shirō begins his evolution. The evolution cause’s the void to start to condense around him.] [Big–Bang: Shirō is beginning to reach the final stage of his evolution. Shirō evolves into the {Voice of The World} resulting in the void to implode onto itself. The resulting explosion resulted with the creation of the multiverse.] [New Role: Shirō gets used to the idea of being God. {Medusa} gives him a pep talk. Shirō start’s to study the {Akashic Records} to create a planet.] [Cardinal World: Shirō uses {Voice of The World} to create his first solar system. Shirō creates the Cardinal World as his base of operations.] [Earth: Shirō has {Medusa} find a version of Earth similar to his old one. {Medusa} finds one but is concerned about the traits this Earth has. {Medusa} informs Shirō that she found one. Shirō goes to Earth(DxD).] [Kyoto: Shirō appears outside of Kyoto, Japan. He has {Medusa} create a identity for him to use. Shirō meets kunou who is distressed about her mother’s disappearance.] [Yasaka: Shirō saves Yasaka from the hero faction. Yasaka ask if he is a God? Shirō explains that he can be considered one, but is much more then a God.] [Time Goes On: Shirō has lived in Kyoto for over a years. Shirō and Yasaka have been growing closer as time goes on. {Medusa} is worried that Yasaka is stealing her master.]

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