Written at the time of chapter 12 I quite like that the story starts with him adquiring mundane talents and not jumping directly onto the supernatural. Can't say much about the plot because it's too early though. My advise is that you don't introduce too many characters too fast. In these 12 chapters, 4 franchises have already appeared, and for the characters to feel alive you'll have to take your time and carve them slowly. Personally, I'd like this to go into a harem route, with proper romance and believable interactions between the lovers, but that's just what I want. You should be aware that writing a good harem is difficult; the more people you add, the more you'll have to keep track of. I'm going to follow you for the time being. I've been trying to find a soiritual successor to NEET receives a datong sim sustem, and your novel has potential. Although English isn't your main language, you have a good grasp of it, and sentences can be undestood without loosin braincells, even if you can definitely improve. Keep at it!
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Even though I mentioned them, I am not sure if I will invest my time in it like Silent Voice. I have hinted it but if Shouko doesn't invest in my novel then I will discard her completely.
