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Azerath
AzerathLv13yr
2022-01-13 19:57

Самой худшее в этом дерьме это то что грамматика плохая не понятно ничего и также персонаж скучный и сюжет очень скучен. Самой худшее в этом дерьме это то что грамматика плохая не понятно ничего и также персонаж скучный и сюжет очень скучен.

My Upgrades Are Invincible Old/Betrayed/Forgotten/Dead

Azazyel
4.2
180 Chs

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Shika_Kagura
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Red_Death_0Lv1

I'm surprised to see people think this is good. I read this story but just found it boring and irritating. mc just goes with the flow of the original story and the writer makes mc pretty bland in his story, he just fuses things and takes care of Bell. Every chapter i read and i look at the comments section, no one gives a critique of the story. I think that they are brain dead or indeed the author is deleting people's comments

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Pure_R18_Terror
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Honest Review:- Writing Quailty (3 Stars): It's readable so three stars but still it has a lot of problems. There are periods, commas, quotations and bunch of other stuff that's plain missing. On top of that there's also the numerous grammatical mistakes littered throughout the thing. Their, They're, your, you're and the likes are being used interchangeably and that 's a major problem. So far I haven't noticed any spelling mistakes so nothing on that. Update Stability (4 Stars): This gets a four stars because I don't really care about it. So long as someone keeps updating I don't have a single problem. Story Development (2 Stars): This is a 2 honestly. It does add in a new character but that 's like the only thing. It didn't deviate from canon at all. I know there are some small changes but every major event goes the same with out any change. On top of that there's also all the bull mixed in, Freya's familia would die smiling if she asked them to so betrayal is BS taken too far. We have Level 6 adventurers dying to Ishtar's people. Oh and I'm ignoring all the forced stuff here. The one thing I've learnt is that you should always try to deviate from canon if you want to deliver something enjoyable and for lack of better words, original. Character Desgin (2 Stars): It just doesn't do it for me. The MC has a very bland personality that just goes with whatever others decide, he refuses to think for himself and keeps on making dumb decisions. His power isn't a cheat? That's BS, his power IS a cheat. He makes Elder Dragon Level Gear and hands it out like candy and what did he need for it? A few drops of blood, and some other low level weapons. I admit that it was Divine Blood but still Elder Dragon Level is going too far. The other characters aren't really done right. For me the thing with Hestia was quite stupid and forced, Lili just went for him as soon as they came back from the dungeon, I'm sorry but you don't get the trust of someone with a past like hers that easily. Furthermore, Freya's intelligence was also knocked down several notches to make several events. World Background (4 Stars): Frankly, I don't care about this at all. As someone who has both read and watched Danmachi I don't really need that much detail on this so I'm happy with it. ================= I've already stopped reading it as I can't do it anymore and this is from someone who enjoys reading MTLs. Hope my review helps and with that I'll be off.

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CokeWhale
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Asking for money for this low quality a story is beyond ridiculous to me. Even ignoring the content for now, the spelling, grammar and styling is middle-school-homework level bad. It's bad even for a first draft. That the writer then has the balls to release it in that form is.. something else. The content is honestly pretty childish, but should be less of a focus than presentation, for now. Conveying a story is difficult, but continuing with this kind of lazy writing will never get you anywhere.

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