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xlvlx
xlvlxLv43yr
2021-11-27 16:54

The grammer is bad but i like the story and his goal. I just hope Mc and Airin will be together forever and they will not betray each other.

Rinnegan in Boruto

Dead_Armor
3.5
48 Chs

Liked it!

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xlvlx
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Please update more!

3yr
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Alice1412
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It’s not just bad grammar but horrible spelling that makes it seem like you’re losing your brain cells reading it. I understand English is not their first language but yhey can at least put in the effort to search up the correct spelling or invest in a dictionary.

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Dead_Armor
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Pssy_Prosecutor445
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Troll_Fox
Troll_FoxLv5

Chapter 4 currently: The concept behind this story is good but the execution is subpar at best. The main flaw that the author has is that they rush through things too quickly. Now let’s get to the main points: Writing Quality: Barely readable. As stated earlier, the author rush through things and doesn’t give characters any type of emotions behind their actions. This make it difficult to understand characters and the action they take. Story Development: There’s barely anything i can say here since it’s just the start. Character Design: This is a bad one. Currently, characters have no personality whatsoever. Actions done by them make no sense. Take the “neglected treatment” for example, I doubt that the main cast would allow things to get that far, especially naruto who has been a victim of such thing. World Background: Literally everything revolves around “Root bad, Danzo bad, Mc and his family are treated badly, woe be me” and it’s annoying. Not to mention how flawed the backstory of the ocs are, Root agents are literally brainwashed till they’re blank state. Danzo is not a character that can trust anyone with that type of information or power. And even if somehow the ocs backstory are somehow true, Danzo literally have failsafes on his root soldiers. I doubt he’ll let the father live since he knows so much.

3yr
manyaktavuk
manyaktavukLv3

I dont like it and i think its waste of time Amateur and mc like child .q Jdjdjsjsjjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjddjjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdddhhdjdjdhdhdhhdhdudyeysdd

3yr
johan_alpas
johan_alpasLv4

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rez_asgari
rez_asgariLv1

is this dropped??? it is pretty good ....... .. ...............................................................................................................

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The_Sophic
The_SophicLv4

mc is a naive child with extremely low eq, he is like one of those idiotic emo wannabe villains, I personally didn't like his character ... the grammar was also bad ... But some people might like the mc who knows 🤔

2yr
Blazer_MC
Blazer_MCLv3

Pretty good but there are a lot of annoying grammar and spelling errors. I recommend grammarly, it’s free

1yr
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