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Karma_Slap
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2022-03-29 09:10

Book starts off really strong, but it fizzles fast. It feels like the first ~50 chapters were edited and then the author stopped fixing minor grammatical errors. Character wakes up in his new world with lots of questions and we expect answers, but then he just never asks anything, so we're extremely short on world-building and even shorter on any semblance of a logical progression of events. MC "drops to his knees" dramatically like 1x every 5 chapters for a while? Some basic things that could be fixed and would help a ton. Progression-wise, the author sets up a decent magic system and sets the stage for our characters to progress,

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