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Chris_Gill
Chris_GillLv153yr
2022-03-28 11:52

It started off good with the initial stage, making money, developing the romance. However during this phase there are alot of confusing scenarios where the readers are clueless to what is going on. But soon as he lost his V-card it really starts going down hill. Romance side MC started acting like a beta, almost fainting at the FL cuteness like the cheezy Rom-Com Sugar specials... Then from then on it was nothing but Plot after plot against MC. The 2nd arc I got through the I guess the beginning, but couldn't proceed. He went from Mia being his slave to him being the slave of Mia and his boss. He never gets a chance to make a decision as everything is forced on him into this arc. I did a batch unlock to ch 150 ish but 122 is it. I just can't take where the story is and can't push through it.

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