webnovel
SR_2027
SR_2027Lv53yr
2021-11-08 23:58

Everything is good until now. Writing quality is good. Almost none grammatical mistakes... Story development is good but hope he just doesn't share his power to his family because they literally threw him away. If that happens and he shares his power to his family saying that his father didn't knew about it or it was his stepmothers fault but she's family, I will literally drop this novel. Hope he doesn't go such way. Character designs is good, but we don't know much about MC's personality and traits but this is just start so nothing can be said about it. But I personally believe that mc is smart but naive... Updating stability good... World background is also good. There are thousands of possibilities for future development of Mc and his sect. =========================== BTW, I have some great ideas for this novel. How about adding many chilché like: a player being reborn, a player which was born in present world of MC but got reincarnated in the new world(from where the players comes), player who can see future, players with their own system, players who have artifacts with great abilities. And our MC can get these power, abilities or artifacts by killing them in game (also dead in real life due to several reasons like electrical cutoff, building collapse or heart attacks...

Liked by 12 people

LIKE
Replies1
chichi32310
chichi32310Lv14

sadly its been abandoned i have seen stories like this before but the one thing that would make it perfect that no author seems to think of is the players being able to bring abilities out of the game which means the game would explode on earth with millions of people desperate to play it making a win win situation the earth becomes stronger and he gets thousands of people earning points to eventually turn him into a god

Other Reviews
Related Stories

What Do You Mean There Are Other Transmigrators In My Harem Fantasy?

In the most cliched fashion, a giant truck-kun smashed into my World, killing everyone with it. And in the next most cliched event, I was given a second chance in life by the gods to live another life in a world of swords, magic and dragons! It’s literally a dream come true! Be a hero? Who has the time?! Conquer the world? Like hell I’ll do something so troublesome! Diving into dungeons, exploring ancient ruins and meeting all the weirdos of the world? Sign me right up!! I’m only interested in travelling the world to find the most interesting materials I can use to write the best story I can! I’ll show you my creativity and dazzle this new world with the stories I’ll write! I’ll fight with dragons, swim with krakens, wrestle giants, eat all the cakes and bed the beauties! Time to live this life however I want! Eh? A psycho is running around the world saying that they are the hero who will slay the demon lord? Why is there such a crazy person? There’s someone out there threatening the world with nukes? How did they even find out how to make those? Some crazy hobo is going into other people’s houses to smash pots to look for money? That guy really must be crazy. What Do You Mean There Are Other Transmigrators In My Harem Fantasy? ----- [Character Creation:] [Gender:] [Male] [Female] >[Futa] *** Notes: Any R-rated scenes will be denoted by a '*' followed by an 'R' with the number of 'R's showing how much of it is R-rated. '*R' would be around 25%, '*RR' would be about 50% and '*RRR' would most likely be the entire chapter. You can join our discord through this link: https://discord.gg/CRrb56c

Draekai · Fantasy
4.1
1096 Chs

Reincarnated With A Glitched System: Why Is My MP Not Running Out?

Alternative Title: "Reincarnated as the Hero's Daughter: Why Is My MP Not Running Out? After living a life filled with hardships and suffering which ended in her ultimate sacrifice to protect her family and defeat the foes that she hated the most, our protagonist suddenly finds herself being brought to a white space where a God of Reincarnation quickly realizes he committed a mistake. "Wait, you're not from Earth?! Oh, my bad!" After being mistaken for a "good soul" due to her high positive karma count, she is reincarnated by error and given a glitched system as her only gift to explore this new world. Now, she finds herself being reincarnated as a half-elf girl named Sylph with two loving and doting parents. However, as she grows up, she begins to find weird things... "Why is my father just slaying a dragon leisurely?" "Eh? My mother can heal any wound or disease?!" "Wait! Why is my MP never running out? What's going on in here?!" Join Sylph as she explores a new world of endless possibilities, fights against the ghosts of the past that torment her parents’ lives, discovers herself and makes good friends along the way. Who knows? Perhaps this time she’ll even save the world! MP = Mana Points Over 100000 Words available for FREE! Daily Chapters Note : Vote for the Novel for extra weekly chapters. 100 Power Stones = 1 Extra Chapter per week 200 Power Stones = 2 Extra Chapters per week 500 Power Stones = 5 Extra chapters per week 10 Golden Tickets = 2 Extra chapters per week 20 Golden Tickets = 3 Extra chapters per week 50 Golden Tickets = 7 Extra chapters per week

PancakesWitch · Fantasy
4.8
1714 Chs