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89thBAMMLv33yr
2021-11-10 11:38

Wow this story is comolete and utter GARBAGE. waste of four hours. please pause this story, go on YouTube and learn how to write a story and before you post use Gramerly. The story has a interesting concept but the world building is terrible, not to mention the exposition of a 13yr final exam essay. This story seems like a 13yr with mommy issues that gets bullied at school wrote this. I would say more but the story is so terrible that you would have to pay me to give pointers on the specifics of what you did wrong. I'm mainly angry that I wastes my 2hr of my time on this but. But if I didn't tell you your story is trash you'd have a whole bunch of yes men enabling you stagnation as a writer

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Default_Lemon
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Cythiano
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doomsdayangel
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mc is too naive and stupid

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Reveal spoiler

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universe_creation
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I hate so much about it but i'll name two things: 1. Why does he want to be friends? he is a literal monster. 2. he needs to forget his mother.

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Love the story keep dem chapters coming. ……………………… ………………………………………………….. ……………………… ………………………………………………….. ……………………… ………………………………………………….. ……………………… …………………………………………………..

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Default_Lemon
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Hello everyone just wanted to say a quick thank you for reading this far! Also special thanks to Hot_tater for those yummy power stones! I shall make this book great!

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Electric_Dream246
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Author this story is amazing and I really like it. Please continue the story and can you make it a multiverse. Like he will travel to another universe like Attack on Titan, Pacific Rim, Transformer and maybe Godzilla King of the Monster or Godzilla Vs Kong where he meet another Godzilla and maybe help Godzilla when he is in danger like when he fighting Ghidorah or when he fight Mecha Godzilla and also maybe go to Marvel and gather all the 6 infinity stone making him more powerful. I imagine him helping Eren achieve his freedom and also give him a human form so that he can get easier to hide in the world and close to Eren, Mikasa and Armin and maybe [SPOILER] Eren didn't have to die and Mikasa and Eren can live happily together or you can make that Mikasa fall in love with MC. When he is in the Pacific Rim world. You can help the human and also at there you can make MC farm his level, skill point and bio point. I actually don't why I mention transformers except that it has cool giant alien robot. In Godzilla King of the Monster maybe he can travel in that world but way before the start of the fight and when the ancients people see him. They will describe him in the wall as a God and the strongest among the other Titan and when the scene where they found Godzilla Vs Ghidorah or Godzilla Vs Kong picture in the wall. They will found something that is way more dangerous than any Titan they have seen. Something way bigger and stronger than any of the Titan. The true Alpha of the Titan. The King Of All King of Titan. The true God of Titan. They witness a picture of another type of Godzilla but way bigger and stronger then the Godzilla in their world and at the same wall they see a word discribe at wall in ancient language. So many scientists come and try to know the meaning of the world and after many month. They finally know what the world mean. The word describe his name is Josh the Legendary Shin Godzilla and say that he is incarnation of destruction and live as he can destroy any creature and anything in his way and heal and revive any creature that follow him. It also say that he can speak the human language and he has fight countless creature alone by himself and say that he is an immortal being that can never die. When the scientists read this they were shock and scare if the creature. By only reading those word they know how dangerous the creature is and when they see they the last sentence of the world they were shock and scare when they read those word. The word say that giant went into the earth and have fallen asleep into a slumber and they wait for their God to awake again. After they finish reading those word. They immediately sent those word to the higher up and they gather a meeting to find this creature and maybe try to communicate with the creature because it has show that it can speak which mean that it has very high intelligence and maybe comparrible to a human intelligence. I really want to write more thing but the word is already over 3000. I hope you can continue the story and please don't drop the story

3yr
Crazy_potatoes
Crazy_potatoesLv4

Dear author~san as i'm Saying "i want to become strong to return to my mother or whatnut"! Then this is i always saying on my previous comments on his/her story that "unintentionally"deleted...i keep on waiting the reply of the author or other reader to enlighten me if i'm wrong or harsh on my words but that's how i feel when the mc is strong then why are feeling bad about other's if you have goal/s! And what's on irking me is he will give them a favor for what he did on their kingdom for killing it's people!? Why not kill them to gain bio-points or etc. That you need to become strong then you can came back to your mother as soon as possible.their are alot of worlds to explore, and this too the part the most annoying if you want to have connection, friend's, or to have a partner to talk to why didn't you wish to have a human form of shin godzilla of your choice? The story is great The character's are great too The world backgroun is too The story development is amazing i cannot deny it but why you cannot even reply to my comment!? Then you can enlighten me

3yr
Isaac_Reid
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now this IS intriguing eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

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Kevon_Lewis
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