I really like it! The story is giving me hitchhiker of the galaxy vibes a bit, though that may just be because I'm not very familiar with the concept. I like that it's fast paced, and I also like that you treat everything as 'normal', even though it's fantasy (as opposed to feeling the need to explain every little detail). As for tips, I have only two. Firstly, mind your verb tenses. You tend to switch between past and present tense at times. And secondly, try to limit the descriptive bits a little. You're great at those (and I love your vocabulary), but personally I'd switch a bit more between description and action, if that makes sense. đ
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