Great story! It gets a bit confusing at first, but you quickly clear things up. 😁 It's quite fast-paced, which I like, and the concept is really interesting! The only tip I have is try to switch things up a bit with sentence lengths. I think that would make it an even easier read!

Are his parents talking about what I think they're talking about? 😂

That's encouraging 😂

This is a great description of the game

Sounds familiar these days

Imagine waking up that that, yikes

Anyways... there's that. No biggie. 😅

I really like it! The story is giving me hitchhiker of the galaxy vibes a bit, though that may just be because I'm not very familiar with the concept. I like that it's fast paced, and I also like that you treat everything as 'normal', even though it's fantasy (as opposed to feeling the need to explain every little detail). As for tips, I have only two. Firstly, mind your verb tenses. You tend to switch between past and present tense at times. And secondly, try to limit the descriptive bits a little. You're great at those (and I love your vocabulary), but personally I'd switch a bit more between description and action, if that makes sense. 😁

I'd take that personally 😂

Something about the name LIFE CORPS just sounds shady, like they harvest organs or something 🤔

Alan seems awfully calm about this situation.

Whoa, that escalated quickly 😅

I feel ya

Wow, thank you so much for the thorough review! And thank you for giving genuine tips. This is definitely something I can work with. Writing has always been just a hobby for me (up until now), so the only knowledge I have about it comes from reading and simply doing it. I didn't even know there were YouTube channels like this. I'm really enthusiastic to learn from them and improve my work! So thank you so much for that. 🤗 Your work is amazing by the way, it was also one of the view stories on here that instantly hooked me and kept me reading!

Thanks! 😁 Happy to hear it is being received well!

Thank you for taking the time to review my story, I really appreciate that! And thank you even more for the words of praise. It's a romance, but I don't want it to be *just* a love story, so I'm happy to hear that's coming across right. It could use some editing, so I plan on taking the time for that soon. I used to do it in between writing, but I always end up overediting which shows in the storyline, so I've decided to do things different this time.

Awesome, thank you so much for all that positivity! I was afraid Gen was still a little flat, so I'm really happy to hear this! 😁

Thanks! I've tried many styles and POV's but found this works best for me, so I'm happy to hear it's also being received well. :)

Thank you for your review, glad you enjoy the story. 🤗

Amazed by how well you worked out your lead right from the start. Your descriptions are amazing! You use metaphors very well and really manage to make the story come to life. 🙌 Also I love your take in sci-fi and the year 2050. Either you've researched well or you simply know a lot. Honestly it's such a breath of fresh air to read something that's also theoretically correct. Well done author, keep up the good work!