Review Detail of LazyPandao in One Piece: All For Revenge?

I like the effort, I'm gonna do this review as clear as I can because I really want to read what you write and to be of better quality. First is the writing quality that I think is not a problem, most of the time I felt uncomfortable reading was not in descriptive parts but on how you describe emotions and express them, to put it simply the interactions between the characters feel like you think about it a lot, and example of such a thing that I can give you is like the first time you chat with a girl, everything you message that girl will fell forced, well that's how it feels for me. Second is the development of the story, the pace you are going is slow in places where it should be fast and fast in places where it should be slow. You are putting too much focus on the conversation between the characters which is good but your chapters are only 2000 words max I think or less and this is slowing other things that could make the story much better like, explaining the power levels of the so that we can have an idea of the mc progress, remember that this is not an animated show but something you are writing so we cant see the progres, you have to write some form description on how he is developing the devil fruit or haki, and make some boundaries, it doesn't have to be like in wuxia novel with the breakthrough from realm to realm but at least based on the anime you can describe it, awakening fruit or the color of haki, the distance and the direction of observation haki if is going to be future sith or the voice of all thing, those details make a huge difference. The last one is about the characters most of them are from one piece except the mc so I will focus on the mc, to put it bluntly, he is heavily inconsistent with how you planted his background, a person that has been tortured for more than a decade, keep in confinement in a room and humiliated will never trust other easily, falling in love is almost out of the question, maybe lust, I'm worried about how you are going to build a harem that is not pokemon capturing or robot girls that see the mc say that is handsome and falls in love in one day. So for an mc that is traumatized by torture and want revenge maybe you should change something like, being low key, the way he joins fisher tiger after scaping is probably one of the most retarded plots I have seen, the first thing I would do in that situation is found an island that is completely desolate with beasts and train to death for revenge, use Shikky and Pluto for training and information, something like telling them Ace news for help, build and underground organization or something like that. The world government is the most powerful force with the biggest information network in the world of one piece, they need the mc to conquer the world, even spare his life after killing a celestial dragon, so they don't need the so-called proof to destroy fisher tiger pirate group just suspicion is enough to call a buster call on them, Ohara was destroyed for less in the anime, so I think all the fisher tiger plot is brain death. Well, I really hope you read this and don't get offended I really want you to improve and let me enjoy. By the way, don't be the kind of guy that deletes reviews, if you delete it I will re post it again and again, so it doesn't make sense.