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Librarian_Heroen
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2021-11-22 02:54

I've seen stories with futas, and even one with trap, but I've never seen one as good as yours! The others managed to self-sabotage at some point, I hope you won't do the same. I think you're missing a more concrete goal for the future, for now she wants to increase her harem, but she'll do that naturally so it would be nice to give a bigger goal. I think it could show some more cute moments with her partners, it's fine for now, but in the future we should get more familiar with them, because we already know their background, so it would be interesting to have some character development. But for now, I'm really loving your story!

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Librarian_Heroen
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Ah, espera, brasileiro!?

GNAR
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Sim kkkkk

Librarian_Heroen:Ah, espera, brasileiro!?
GNAR
GNARAuthor

I'll keep that in mind for the next few chapters, as the next chapter is ready, I won't be able to put your suggestions into practice, but I really liked them.

Librarian_Heroen
Librarian_HeroenLv1

Em todos os lugares...

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Librarian_HeroenLv1

I will be reading from now on, so whenever I can help, I will.

GNAR:I'll keep that in mind for the next few chapters, as the next chapter is ready, I won't be able to put your suggestions into practice, but I really liked them.
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