The writing is good. What bothers me is the utter lack of common sense displayed by each of the characters. It starts out by the mc saying hes only likes fully grown women, but constantly basically grooms a 11year old Hermine. Also he basically has no other good quality beside his system. Hes only calm because he knows the story, which doesnt make sense since he completly loses this in other situations even though the parts of the story can be life threatening. He also seens to have some kind of god complex, pretending to know everything and showing it to Hermine, even doe at any point the story could deviate. His utter lack of considering this shows what kind of dimwit the mc actually is. Next is the parents. What kind of absolute psychopaths refer to them self as mommy and daddy. Its not llike he mc is like 0 -1,5 yrs old where he has to learn the words. Next off, instead of doing anything normal, like teasing the kids for their "puppy love" (=> which is basically the mc grooming a minor), they help the mc in grooming the child, treating them as if they were around the age 14-18. The next thing is how Hermine is displayed. Ok the puppy love thing is nothing to bad, but in the original she was an intelligent and self confident girl. This story makes her the mc's little pet which although sometimes thinks for herself, is reduced to monkey listens, monkey see, monkey do. All in all I think the story had good potential, but it was ruined by the characters. All in all i wont recommend it, you will lose ur braincells reading it
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I know, right!? I mean, freaking Hermione? Eugh. He can do way better.
Hermione had zero self-confidence in the original story until after she made friends and they trusted in her even with their lives. She was absolutely the sort before then to latch onto and follow anyone who valued her. It was an important part of her character and is THE factor that bound her to her friends.
