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2023-04-29 01:06

Nice story building. A little unique story line as it is in the starting phase need more chapter to analysis. So Quickly try to[img=recommend]update more chapters [img=recommend] 🙏

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Vainglory0
Vainglory0Lv4

I have been following this novel since it's earl stages (from when it had 20 chapters) and I have been enjoying every second of it. As you read the story, you can feel the effort the author has put into weaving this intricate piece of art. The plot is solid. TBH, I expected the same old cliche story of some random NEET getting overpowered inside the world of his favorite game/novel, but I couldn't have been more wrong, and I have never been so elated on being wrong before. There is some very creative stuff here. The author has put effort into doing something different from other novels of this kind and I believe his hard work has paid off. The writing quality, although not perfect, is one of the best you can find on this platform. The way the author has portrayed emotions of the characters is very realistic. The main character is neither a righteous prick nor a ruthless psychopath. He is a human with actual emotions. He feels guilty, he wants to feel pleasured, he yearns for his own happiness and peace of mind and he is afraid he might hurt people close to him. He is an actual human being with flaws. After all, it's flaws that make us humans. There is no problem with either the pacing or story development and the updates are on time every day without delays. The fact that a novel of such stature has not yet been recognized by people in this platform leaves a bitter taste in the depths of my throat. I hope to see this novel develop into a bigger masterpiece than it already is in the future so one day I can proudly state that I was an avid fan of this novel since its early stages.

gurpreet31
gurpreet31Lv2

Abysmal MC. You finish a game and what, want to leave the world because, post-game clarity? At the starting point of life yet already saying he doesn't want to be an ordinary person. Boi is 21 years old. Too much tictok influence making these young adults delusional. Bro is depressed becuase he grew up in an orphanage and has no "real" friends. If he played 1 mmorpg, im sure he would have many friends considering how long he can play this 1 game for. Thats just chapter 1. By the end of Chapter 4 he is like; I'm in the game world. I took over the body of a guy who just died by committing 'that'. But now I can have a new chance of life. Also gonna get emotional because we have that 'original body is emotional for family stuff' baggage. He complains about fake friends and relationships in chap 1 yet is ready to exploit relationships and secrets in the game world, his new chance. Literally he just wants everything handed to him. Now another crazy plot point without spoiling anything. MC will get a special item, crazy for a game world isekai. What is particularly remarkable is a few lines introducing it: "We researched it for a long time, but in the end, we realized that no matter what we did, we wouldn't get anything out of it. "..."Obviously, everyone was hesitant. Because this was an illegal place connected to the black market. So no one doubted that they had tried literally 'everything' they could try on that stone. " I was thinking, surely they did THAT. But then the MC does THAT. The novel is a joke. Its not a matter of cliches. Its the way they are presented. Truck-kun works for a reason. Blank screen works for a reason. Trying to write a good reason for leaving the world works if you can write a character/backstory. The force feeding of emotions is heinous. Like a game making the player kill a regular normal small puppy for no reason. Its just there and you have to kill because author wants to artificially create emotions or substance to inflate the novel's ideology. I'm still reading a bit more, seeing if things get better. I held off on writting stuff despite how atrocious the start was. easily 0/10 stuff. I had to write something after reading about Mc doing THAT. Just realized this was the entirety of volume 1. What a great start. Deleting my 2 min older post.

WorthyAdversary
WorthyAdversaryLv1

After about two months of searching, I finally found one more novel that I can confidently say I'll be waiting for in agony for each and every chapter after finishing the previous one. First off is writing quality, which I give 4 stars. It's pretty obvious why, with it being a direct translation of the author's Turkish version of the story, and you can see that, although the spelling is absolutely perfect, the grammar is weird in some parts and just wrong in some other parts, but these mistakes are isolated to one or two per chapter, and so it doesn't really affect the reading flow, hence the 4 stars. Secondly is the stability of updates which I obviously gave 5 stars. Pretty self-explanatory if you look at the update rate. Thirdly is the story development, which I had to give 3 stars. It was either I gave this 3 stars or the character design three stars, but I eventually decided on this. This is solely because of the development of the relationships between the MC and the supporting cast. It feels horribly forced, cringy, and even just "skip the entire chapter" material at times. I actually almost dropped this novel when I read the chapter when the MC talks to his "sister" for the first time, cause it was in the first few chapters of the story, was actually over the phone through text whilst still managing to be extremely cringy, and I truly thought that the rest of the novel would be just as trashy once I read that interaction. The development of the relationship between the MC and the MC of the game he transmigrated into was even worse. Here's the "but" that all y'all have been waiting for though: the start of the relationships might have been utter trash, but the developments afterward truly feel real, and made me feel emotional at times. And so, if you can get past the start of the relationships (I just completely erased them from my mind at this point and inserted generic plot development) you'll be in for a real treat I believe, as you'll actually be emotionally invested in these characters at some point. The rest of the actual story development was pretty good, with nothing special about it, but nothing bad about it either, so yeah, that's my spiel on the story development. Now, onto the character design, which I gave 4 stars. It's pretty generic to be honest, like the actual story development, there really doesn't seem to be anything new or truly mindblowing. All the characters have believable backgrounds, and some backgrounds are still shrouded in mystery. Although, one thing, because of one's investment in the character after one point, and how the author has created situations in which the MC has interacted with all female characters to a certain extent, there will probably be pretty strong opinions in the future when one FL pulls ahead of the others. So, unless this novel will include a harem (which I am not advocating for in any way cause I am strictly in the no harem gang), there will inevitably be some mad people when one heroine eventually wins. Finally, there's the world background, which once again, is pretty generic, with nothing special about it, and so it's another 4 stars. The synopsis is all you need in order to be able to guess the entirety of the world's background and power system, as long as you've read other novels within this genre of course. Overall, the story scratched the itch I had for another story where the MC knows the future, kinda, and so that's why it'll be one of the novels I'll be closely following. It's a great novel, and, as long as the story follows that path that it's been trudging on right now, then I truly believe that it'll be something special on this platform ("special" meaning not a trashy harem, lust fulfillment novel for virgin, middle-aged men). Keep it up author, you're doing a great job with this novel!

Chris_Garman_5939
Chris_Garman_5939Lv11
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