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2021-10-22 13:43

Review time~ First of all, you are a great author and you clearly know what you need to express through your writing. You did a good job with the characters info since thanks to that I didn't have any confusion about who is who? Then your prologue it was short, simple and attention-grabbing especially the last line. I like it the best! After that, the storyline begins. I must say your writing is very creative since the words you use to convey their clothing to personality and the surroundings are very elegant and poetic. And the theme of reincarnation along with the arranged marriage sequence is a good choice. It's a fresh concept that I have read so far. And you are truly hardworking, posting 9 chapters in less than a week is in no way a task. And I believe if you keep up with this pace, you will get contacted soon. Last but not the least you should change your book cover since it's very simple and doesn't really catch one's eye. A good cover means more reader~so note my words. Now then, all the best and happy writing!

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Hehehe....After 5 days, book cover changed. Thanks for the feedback!

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I just saw and it's so much better then before! And I honestly love it!! ❤❤❤

HANA_4345:Hehehe....After 5 days, book cover changed. Thanks for the feedback!
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