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2022-09-03 19:29

This story is really well written and the flow is pretty good. It's an interesting story i would recommend. Writing quality was really good. The background was set up nicely. The development did kind of become a typical shounen troupe after a while but main character was interesting enough to keep me committed to finishing the story. All in all, it's a story I'd say you should definitely give this story a shot!

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Full disclosure, I have only read up to chapter 55. The grammar /writing quality is pretty good, to be honest really high by this sites standards. Updates also seem to be pretty stable and chapters are of a decent length each so no problems there for me. Start development, now this hurts to say ok, but as far as I have read most of the story is just a revthread of arifureta with a somewhat different mc with different powers. Most scenes aren't original, though the few that are are done decently. This is just like that avenger arifureta fan fic as in they both follow the original scene by scene, though the avengers one even more so than this one. If you haven't read arifureta then it should be enjoyable, but if you have it's like re reading that book all over again just with it being less edgy. I wish things were more original, I really do, but to add on yo that the mc seems to be weaker than what the original Hagime was at the point of the story I stopped at with the intro of Teo. The mc has such an amazing ability with his alchemy but it is barely explored at all, how the he'll is he a researcher?,he has barely even scratched the surface if what could be done, but he just calls it a day... Mc isn't too smart or dumb, he kind of leans both ways though more towards dumb for comedic purposes. Also I just hope that the adopted daughter and her mother from the original book don't have anything to do with the mc, like whyyyy would he adopt some girl and get into a relationship with her extremely normal mother. If you want cuteness get a pet instead of a daughter that isn't actually yours and a mother who hascexperience with someone else. That was one of the things that stumped and annoyed me the most in the original and I hope it doesn't happen here again. Also, the stat/skill plate exists, the author seems to try to make you forget about it since the last time the mc s srats were shown was like chapter 10 and I'm on chapter 55. It's not that hard ok, just summarise reasonable stats and skills, what's so hard about it? Still salty that the mc is weaker than the original arifureta mc. Character design is OK since most of the characters are copy pasted from arifurets since it's a fanfic Same with world background. Could have been so much better if the author took some creative liberty, rather than going scene by scene after the original. Why does this have to keep happening with every arifureta fic. I feel like this isn't made for arifureta fans, the more you know about the original the less you like this since it's just too similar, I came to read a fanfic not a rewrite with a slightly different mc, but you know what I got. Too bad, hahhh

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