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CriticalReader
CriticalReaderLv22yr
2022-08-05 03:45

Can be summarised as mediocre and disappointing Interesting premise but nothing is done with it... story quickly devolves into isekai cliché about a wannabe hero Use of details in parenthesis is distracting Too many inconsistencies in plot and worldbuilding Grammatical errors almost every paragraph and limited choice of words Side characters are somewhat interesting but unfortunately mc is bland and much less fleshed out... makes you wonder who is the focus of the story This novel would have been better if it focused on mc's quest for power and answers but was instead wasted on a silly tale about another heroic monster protagonist

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Okay, first of all, I want to thank you for your review even if it wasn't very positive. Even so, as a novice writer,I appreciate any kind of criticism, good or bad, that can help me improve my writing in the future. Second, regarding the numerous grammatical errors and the poor amount of vocabulary, (I know it's not an excuse) but English is not my native language and I'm far from being able to master it. I am still practicing. However, I try to maintain a certain quality of writing, so I always proofread and correct all the chapters before publishing them. I don't know how many chapters you read before abandoning the story, but if you got past thirty chapters you will surely have noticed that where it says "Author's Thoughts" I almost always ask to be informed of possible errors so I can correct them as soon as possible. I am aware that we are not all the same and that we all have different tastes. Still, I'm very sorry you didn't like the story. Thank you very much and I hope you have a nice day (or afternoon or night. I don't know what time it is in your country, Hahaha). PS: I liked the Five Hargreeves gif, it made the review much lighter.

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