Review Detail of Mepha in Game of Thrones : Paladin of Old Gods (Draft)

I've read 27 chapters, and I can tell you with certainty that this is not my cup of tea. It started off surprisingly well, especially considering what site we are on now. But from the moment the protagonist got into his first battle, as the author himself ironized, it all went downhill. No, it wasn't a fatal problem that the protagonist foolishly revealed himself to be a genius. No I roughly understand the reason for it. 1 - The author wanted to make the protagonist an exemplary peer of Jon Snow and others. It's not clear why this was so important, maybe he wants to marry the mc to beauties from the show, Marjorie for example? 2 - Because of the first point, the author created a time limit, there is so much to do, and there is not enough time to do it all! So the main character started to realize his plans as a 4 year old child. 3 - The author realized that it was hard to achieve the planned goals for a 4 year old child from a retarded home and... So he added a certain "The Watcher" to the fanfic. All would be well, but all this began to accumulate like a snowball, which only harms the book. 1 and 2 - Because of the author's decision to make mc a contemporary of Jon Snow, the author unknowingly caused a lot of problems, both logical, in the form of absurdity of what is happening, such as serious negotiations of the Queen of Thorns with a 4-year-old child. So problems with dissonance of the - above described, and suffered from the characters and the behavior of the characters from the original. 3 - In an attempt to smooth the angles with the new character, the author has turned a more - less serious fanfic in a full Marty Stu. The Watcher turns out to be a very gifted teacher, revered by his crowd of apprentices. By his mere presence, he has created a shield for the protagonist to keep him from being killed as a child. But that's not all, the apprentices... These apprentices in turn turned out to be masters of combat, espionage and so on, and of course by all the laws of the genre, they will train soldiers for mc, train spies and all the right people-subordinates to realize the goals of our mc. And I'm even silent about politics in general, and the reactions of the various factions to the antics of the protagonist. For myself, one of the main problems of the fanfic is its motif: World Peace. Which is quite naive in the setting of A Song of Ice and Fire. You're already subconsciously beginning to downplay the merits, skipping details and prodigious work on the fanfic, because you can already smell the rainbow ponies and the song about friendship. Exaggerating of course, but I think you get the point. In the end, we have a well-written work where the author was able to balance plot and humor. Quality product, which, unfortunately, slowly began to fall to the level of Webnovel.