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2022-01-15 14:51

Meh. Story feels rushed, with ideas just thrown in randomly. Dialogue needs work. Feels like a bunch of teenagers arguing instead of ppl in the late 20-30. This is your typical, “cold, Intelligent, handsome male lead, that contradicts his character by being too stupid to figure out a simple scheme”

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Thank you for your honest review. I will work on the areas you pointed out.

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