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Vandumbo
VandumboLv33yr
2021-10-14 11:05

It had potential, but I do not think of this as a good story. The chapter until now are just drama, MC is child orphan, living in an orphanage. They go to hospital, MC has vampire quirk. "Oh no, he has a villain quirk", MC is shunned (worse than manhua lol), MC get attacked by plot and fight back, scared orphanage manager call governement to take him, MC is taken (let himself be taken even thought he half-knew it) to brainwashing etablishment masquerading as a "evil quirk retablishment institute" or something like that. MC meet Himiko (lol). MC wants Himiko, so MC become Himiko's friend, then more than friend. MC gets tortured for plot (bad guy trying to brainwash yadayada). MC plan to escape with Himiko. The... drama is kinda pointless, MC can't stop thinking he will kill everyone, get revenge and all that, but I think it will takes years before it take place, and the story is goign forward at snail pace. It takes time. And pointless drama. It would be so much, so MUCH MORE BETTER (in my opinion) if MC was shown directly in his adulthood, or teens. We would know MC as a villain, then little by little reveal thing on him (like in Classroom of the elites) I do not think you will like this story, you can still give it a try

MHA: The Birth Of A Vampire

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4.2
76 Chs

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Fish_m
Fish_mLv3

I agree with you . I think the story is too much slow .

3yr
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Miyoko
MiyokoLv3

Agree

3yr
5
Riekoo
RiekooLv4

3yr
DreamCreator
DreamCreatorLv11

Agree

3yr
3
Spc_Monk
Spc_MonkLv5

I agree . I don't even think thr author can finish this ff because the amount of bs he threw. I think it's close to dropping this ff. want to give melancholy vibe but all that shown was dramatic bs ...

2yr
2
DeLuque
DeLuqueLv1

Hermano eres un salvavidas

10mth
Red_Eclips
Red_EclipsLv4

5mth
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AcomsAuthor

Hey, the author here. I just wanted to mention that I am a novice writer, this is my first story and it's nice to see people reading it, I hope you enjoy it. If you have any constructive criticism I will be happy to read it to improve. Ummm I should also mention that English is not my first language, so I hope you forgive me if there are any spelling or grammatical errors. If you want to support me you can go to my pat *** / acoms and even if you cannot support me financially I will be very grateful if you give a good review to the fanfic and give me a stone of power.

3yr

Acoms
AcomsAuthor

Hello, it's me again, I just wanted to say that if you are a new reader I wanted to tell you the following. I have already edited the first chapters, which were very poorly translated. So I hope you give it a chance if you thought not to read it because of the criticism about the bad translation. I also did a small rewrite in the prologue so if you have already read it, I recommend that you do it again so that you understand what the future plot will be like. Thanks for your attention. I hope you enjoy my book.

3yr
sari_saarinen
sari_saarinenLv3

weakest vampire i have heard of cant he even control ppl he bites so whats makes himancestor of vampires and shoulndt vampires have basic mind manipulation at least and immortality like dafuq he is more like weakened ghoul than vampire he is worst vampire like dafuq i dont think author knows whats vampire and in mha he gets clapped in secs whit those powers

3yr
Egika
EgikaLv2

Reveal spoiler

3yr
HankTheFisherMan
HankTheFisherManLv4

Reveal spoiler

3yr
Bierbart
BierbartLv14

Reveal spoiler

3yr
Alien_Space_Bat
Alien_Space_BatLv5

Writing: Bad grammar, Wrong quotations, mistakes with MC's gender. Story: Forced plot with society pulling every strings to turn MC evil......from dumb matron to mad scientist. Character: MC's goal is catching waifus and naking harem lol....he could have been in a different situation entirely if he made ROB's help wisely. Updates: Good updating stability. World : MHA verse

3yr
Man_of_culture
Man_of_cultureLv11

Author makes regular mistakes with, he, you, I. Author changes perspectives randomly in the middle of paragraphs. A little proofreading would be adviced. First time ever seeing someone make those mistakes.

3yr
Abeeba
AbeebaLv2

the only annoying/bad thing I can say so far is that you mix up he and she a lot other than that so far so good even if the he she mix up is annoying as frick

3yr
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