Obligatory Author Review. Do you like system novels, with lots of adventuring? You will like this one. At least that's what I would like to think anyhow.
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LIKEI plan on 1. Though I can't guarantee he won't end up at zero or even temporarily 2. Don't count the Felian Nemu, she wants to sleep ON him, not with him in that other sense. She's just protective of her spot.
ChaosAsura0:But will he have a relationship with more then one female or just 1. (Hope it’s 1)
Oh kl good know I hope you stick with 1. It’s going good with just 1. I don’t want adding another to the mix to ruin it.
Aoki_Aku:I plan on 1. Though I can't guarantee he won't end up at zero or even temporarily 2. Don't count the Felian Nemu, she wants to sleep ON him, not with him in that other sense. She's just protective of her spot.
I suggest you check 'terrible writing advice' channel there, so you know how 'not' to write that topic and fall into same mistake lot of new author make (check the honest thought version in older video if possible), I notice a review about 'Tell' problem so I share some quick video that can give you idea about it: ---------------------------------------------------- + "Show, Don't Tell" by Julie Freeman, it a dummy guide and example -- + "Show vs Tell - When to Show" and "Show vs Tell - When to Tell" video from 'Writing with Jenna Moreci' channel (a very good writing advice channel), hope it help
Aoki_Aku:I plan on 1. Though I can't guarantee he won't end up at zero or even temporarily 2. Don't count the Felian Nemu, she wants to sleep ON him, not with him in that other sense. She's just protective of her spot.
Piece of advice to Author. Give all of you chapters a name. It may sound trivial but many people pick up random chapters by their names and see what's happening to decide if to give the novel a try. This is especially true for web novels. Same for me too especially after finding the 1st couple of chapters quite boring . Not everyone has the patience to stick around for 100 or even 40 chapters solely based off some reviews or author's notes in summaries. It will take maybe a day or 2 for you but i believe it will help your novel quite a bit. Rest is up to you.