Review Detail of Airelda in HP: The Secret Heir.
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It's not that the story is bad. The problem lies in the fact that there are no facts. The first 2 chapters are a whole lot of PLOT ARMOR. He needs money? Hey, there is someone running a dice game and he just happens to be carrying around 50K pounds for MC to win it... how convenient! Honestly, the whole thing hit me with a sense of disbelief. I believe the guy isn't dead but in a coma where he is having this unreal dream. If that is true, my rating should be higher but if not... this needs a redo. Funny enough, the grammar isn't that bad, just a few misspelled and wrong word choices here and there.
HP: The Secret Heir.
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Well going in this track of thought, how did he learn legillimency occlumancy etc. cause he shouldn't know them maybe if he went to knockturn alley maybe but still some inconsistencies I like this story tho.
confused4you:I think I have made a mistake when the mc wins the 50k he has won it over a span of few days in different parts of London.
MonsterCreator:Well going in this track of thought, how did he learn legillimency occlumancy etc. cause he shouldn't know them maybe if he went to knockturn alley maybe but still some inconsistencies I like this story tho.